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fix me
By Exodus
We’ll dance down for death
And the stars will all be the same
x broken in iridescent light x
-translate the silence of our eyes, the celestial meaning-
We’ll run away, ashamed.
Declare this love
And tear it away.
My heart will never be enough
To break for you.
If god can’t hear me screaming.
I’ve lost everything.
Break down into the reminiscent
Glory of my perfection
I’ll be okay with this.
If its apart of you.
I wont try to change you.
Dare to chance it.
I already have.
Don’t be afraid to touch me.
Though I’m deep in the shallow waters
Of a fragile winters grasp.
x the glass beneath your feet x
we’ll break and bleed.
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Copyright 2004 Exodus
Published on Friday, March 19, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Thursday, June 9, 2005, Kinkypoptart
(555)
wrote:
The stars will all be the same... THat line really made me think. Great write ~*~tart~*~
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On Friday, March 26, 2004, Juggalotus
(69) wrote:
"If god can't hear me screaming, I've lost everything" That really got me, because I often wonder if He's listening. I agree with the fact that you can't change that which you love, even if the sentiment isn't returned. love and pain go together
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On Friday, March 26, 2004, Tracer
(100) wrote:
"We’ll run away, ashamed. Declare this love", such is the power of love expressed in a splendid manner, simply beautiful write...^vTracerv^
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On Friday, March 26, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
You can tell you wrote a damn good poem when four people each pick out different lines that struck them as incredible. Rock on ;)
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On Saturday, March 20, 2004, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
"Don’t be afraid to touch me. Though I’m deep in the shallow waters Of a fragile winters grasp." Such powerful, beautiful words, and so meaningful. I love this piece, perfectly constructed. Just gorgeous. ~L
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On Saturday, March 20, 2004, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
"My heart will never be enough To break for you."...i really like that line, for some reason it feels like someone has said something like that to me before. very impacting.
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On Saturday, March 20, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
Very well written, I love it. =) Morb
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On Friday, March 19, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
"I'll be okay with this/ If it's apart of you"... your open-minded wisdom is beautiful. I also like the watery/wintery/glassy theme of the end... it's very representative of the subject matter. You make me want to start writing again :)
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On Friday, March 19, 2004, OLd SouL
(732) wrote:
Though I’m deep in the shallow waters- that spoke a few different meanings to me.. Lovely. :::OLd
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