blackhaired beauty
By Bella Butchery
blackhaired beauty
i always wanted to say
gauge out my eyes
with your forked toung.
blind me and leave me
crawling on the floor.
cut fingers
sway over the ground
longing for your feet.
i cannot write anylonger
to anything that is not you--->
i hope you are there,
keep feeling for signs of your willing,
but all i find
is my blood starting to pool
cue-->sweat pooringxxx
cue-->heart poundingxxx
cue-->panic surroundingxxx
swallowing me.
take my blood soaked hand
and dont be scared little one
i am not a monster to be feared.
all i need
is for you to take my knife
and stick it into my heart,
but do it slowly little one.
the blade will grow attached to my chest.
let me live with this pain,
and i will bask in it,
proving my love because
papercuts bleed like my cut veins.
my heart wont fail
because it beats for you.
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Comments on "blackhaired beauty"
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A former member wrote:
This type of intense poems .... excellent narration, descriptive .... full of passion, i like it
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On Friday, July 24, 2009, Mari
(419) wrote:
I wonder if everyone has such a painful or morbid idea of love... do they?
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On Wednesday, November 28, 2007, thelostmessenger
(110) wrote:
thanks for sharing... i love the ending. very visual. nice write. *messenger
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On Tuesday, August 14, 2007, NapoleonsLust
(16) wrote:
way rad. this is a good way to start my day. i applaud thy-NL
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On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
*Stands like a monkeyish bodyguard behind Bella*
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On Monday, May 7, 2007, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
What can I say that hasn't already been said? The last few lines were kick ass...but on a whole it was just...
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A former member wrote:
So descriptive and full of passion. I love it!
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On Saturday, April 21, 2007, Hurtmeplease
(6) wrote:
Most excellent, a lot more graphic than what I have written, but we have obviously both been cut by a blackhaired beauty
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A former member wrote:
dude this poem kicks major ass, its awsome! "all i need is for you is to take my knife and stick it into my heart..."this poem is mind blowing...-rain
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A former member wrote:
let the blade grow attached to my heart.
let me live with this pain,
and i will bask in it,
proving my love because
papercuts bleed like my cut veins.......................Gah Damn my friend!!! That killed me!!! This is the intense writes i love t
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On Tuesday, February 27, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(59) wrote:
I agree with everyone. I really enjoyed it. :)
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, prettydisgrace
(93) wrote:
i like this alot,good lines,and intense.
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Still love this, just wanted you to know. lol :)
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On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
"gauge out my eyes with your forked tongue" - great imagery! Ciao, T/S
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On Tuesday, January 9, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
this is so passionate...yummy! I love this.
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A former member wrote:
Deliciously intense. I loved every bit of it.
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On Wednesday, November 22, 2006, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
So intense...beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
its just great, and i love it
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A former member wrote:
yes, yes... i really like your stuff. this is going on my favorites.
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On Wednesday, September 29, 2004, Savannah
(218) wrote:
I agree. Very intense.
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On Thursday, July 15, 2004, Beautiful Scars
(175) wrote:
Wow..intense..
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On Wednesday, June 30, 2004, aXe FactoR
(333) wrote:
beautiful & intense write, best of wishes 2 u both. :) -MeL-
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On Monday, April 26, 2004, murder_in_clubland
(384) wrote:
gorgeous ~ss
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A former member wrote:
Very deep and emotional... good! :)
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On Wednesday, April 7, 2004, Beautiful Scars
(175) wrote:
Wow..such intensity..I love this. -fairy-
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A former member wrote:
God damn. It is very rare that one finds something so heartfelt as this and so bittersweet. There are no words to describe how amazing this is. It's going on my favorites, as are you.
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On Friday, March 19, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
actually i like this really, a shockingly grotesque yet beautiful yearning/will.. is it love on the extreme? it's painful.. and enchanting.."blackhair beauty"-- such an ominous yet seductive ring to it-- lime
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On Friday, March 19, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
"blackhair-ED beauty.. ehem