The end of earth...
By Cwn Annwn
You wake with black water surrounding you. As everything grows cold you
start to wonder where you have ended up, sleeping so peaceful in your bed...now
surrounded by rancid smells and rotting bodies in this black river. As
the sun starts to show just beyond the trees you push your way through
some leech smothered corpses in a desperate attempt to reach the land on
the left side of the river. The water is growing thinner as all you can
feel is the weight of bodies, hardly floating in the small amount of water
as it drains...but where is it going?
You finally reach the edge of the river and after some struggling you
manage to shift yourself onto a rock that's sticking out of the ground.
You fling some bugs, leeches and even some small slivers of bloody body
parts off of your skin. When feeling so utterly alone you can't help but
wonder where everyone is...after living in the city your whole life the
woods are unknown territory. Some strength and courage manages to get
you off your lazy ass and you start to wander in search of anything that
might help you be on your way back to the comfort of home.
Comments on "The end of earth..."
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On Monday, January 19, 2004, Cwn Annwn
(89) wrote:
Hmmm yes...I think I am going to continue this one...just about another paragraph or so...but ideas are slim these days...*sighs*~GoNe~
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Ahhhh it reminds me of all those serial killer books i used to read. I reccomend you write one as this is the perfect atmosphere and imagery required... Quite impressed...
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, -Oz-
(131) wrote:
i totally agree with drifter...it ended perfectly.....and humans are much too "material needy"......a sequal wouldn't hurt though.... :) ~YeStErDaY~
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Drifter
(265) wrote:
i personally disagree with frumenti. It ended perfectly in my opinion, exposing the reality of humans seeking comfort beyond survival. Maybe i just overanalized it :) Anyway... great story. I had a vivid picture in my head the whole time.
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Cwn Annwn
(89) wrote:
Wow I didn't think anyone would totally understand my thoughts on my topic...thats exactly it...humans seek comfort beyond survival...Its always I want this I want that.~GoNe~
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Drifter
(265) wrote:
So true. I love how that very misguided instinct is what will lead to 'The end of the earth...'. Very well done once again. I'm glad i'm not a nutcase too.
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On Thursday, January 15, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
This is actually a good piece due to the imagery conveyed...it should have been much longer...the theme more explored...very good, though...-l-