Six Feet Deep

By Tangent Ponderings

Pen in hand
These lines I write
Every day
Another fight

I hope for the best
But expect the worst
My life a tragedy
One giant curse

The fear I have of loneliness
Brings me further out of touch
The very things that feed my soul
Do nothing more than eat a hole

Now hearing noises
In my head
Going crazy
Should be dead

I try to live
Try to fight
Awake and thinking
Every night

The words I spit
I soon forget
Six feet deep
Inside a pit

Begging for acceptance
But fearing
And feeling
An evil presence

For now…
My life has gone to shit
Six feet deep
Inside a pit

Yet I still have
My life to live
And only myself
To forgive

And in the end
The pain will quit
Six feet deep buried
In my pit

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Copyright 2003 Bob the Mailman
Published on Monday, December 29, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I was about to give up on this until the last couple of stanzas added a great positive note. I especially can relate to the 'only myself to forgive' stanza. Nicely done. ~Ship!

  • A former member wrote: I loved this. Greatness. Beautiful. -Doll

  • A former member wrote: I think epochalypse has Rhymer Envy. Whos gives a flying fuck about your style; it's yours do with with whatever the hell you want. This was a damn good poem, regardless of anything (I hope that sounds like a compliment; it was supposed to).

  • -Oz- On Sunday, January 18, 2004, -Oz- (131)By person wrote:

    yeah i'm agreeing with braindead.......this is definatly a WOW on my list of poems.....good write! ~YeStErDaY~

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, April 3, 2004, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...yeah, from one rhymer to another, worry not of epoch's views...perfectionism is a virtue, of sorst... Scholar

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, April 3, 2004, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    *sorts*...damn fingers... Scholar

  • stormtalk On Friday, January 16, 2004, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    Everyone else is wrong... the poem is good, the idea is good, but the rhymes are forced. Let go of ABAB, and control your rhymes... don't let them control your words ;)

  • suicideseason On Friday, January 16, 2004, suicideseason (1636)By person wrote:

    i am never wrong!!!;)season

  • Mistress Shadow On Wednesday, January 7, 2004, Mistress Shadow (249)By person wrote:

    I liked this, it moves eloquently.~T~

  • Dancing_Monkey On Monday, January 5, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    lol the power of turning the word shit and the word pit into pure poetry.. I love it.. *claps*

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, January 3, 2004, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...cool...good flow, good rhyme, and nice and dark for us...must read more... -Darun Scholar

  • Drifter On Monday, December 29, 2003, Drifter (265)By person wrote:

    More proof you got talent! Awesome job, keep it coming.

  • Demosthenes On Monday, December 29, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    lovely. i like the change in rhymey structureness. thats not a word... -B

  • A former member wrote: o.O perty. me like. good work. i look forward to more poems in the future._-=Evil=-_

  • Drea On Monday, December 29, 2003, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    i enjoyed this. great title ~Drea~

  • A former member wrote: you're good at this, it flows really easily..keep writing!

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