the alpha of deeds
By FadedBlues
(based on ‘tumbling hair’ by E. E. Cummings)
she came often to this fragrant field, this smiling little girl
with golden hair tumbling as she skipped. the buttercups &
violets welcomed her. the daisies, despite their ill tempers,
were almost joyful to give up their lives to her hand.
this was her alpha, to gather these small gifts of nature &
share them with others. her village was blessed with peace,
and no evil occurred there or in this field.
but on this day, another was there, watching. the sorrow in his
eyes gave testament to his regret, his compulsion. he had seen
her before, alone & unprotected, in this field, & his terrible hunger
was conceived & grew.
it was not his fault, he assured himself. It was the command of the
‘demon’ within that ruled him. like Pontius Pilate, he washed his hands
of his guilt, as he pursued his alpha, & committed his fatal deed…
the angels observed this deed, as they observed all deeds on this
revolving planet. but they were present only to bear witness, they
were not permitted to interfere. being gentle creatures, their witnessing
made them weep, & their tears became the cold rain that coats
the earth.
that beautiful things grow, nourished by that rain,
is the irony of it.
and the fragrant fields of beautiful things, the daisies & buttercups,
will attract other little girls. and those little girls, who are made of
innocence & purity & the illusion that nothing bad will ever happen,
will attract other monsters.
this is our story as we know it.
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Comments on "the alpha of deeds"
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A former member wrote:
"it was not his fault, he assured himself. It was the command of the
‘demon’ within that ruled him"
Ah! Perfect line :-)
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On Thursday, May 21, 2015, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Cummings has always been extraordinary inspiration...
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On Tuesday, November 19, 2013, Numbers Peppelini
(74) wrote:
wondrous innocence caught in the cross-hairs of wickedness. I could only stand back to watch, much like the angels observing this dastardly deed, hand-cuffed by this writer's swift pen...I'm all on this one, thanks
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A former member wrote:
Wonderful...I`ll have to read it`s muse
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On Thursday, November 14, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Friends & Poets, thanks. while there are sorrows & tragedies, there will be poems to record them...
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, Sketso
(416) wrote:
In this, you have made of us angels, because even though we read (observe), we can do nothing, cannot interfere, and the weeping can be felt down deep. FANTASTIC in the sense it draws the reader in, but perhaps you'll excuse me if I do not return.
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A former member wrote:
incredible perspective, i was drawn into and imagining it occurring. i like how the story of it parallels natural/supernatural history. sweet angle. what i learned from this is that i can stand up and help others who are unknowingly unprotected. thank you.
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, M Morgan
(198) wrote:
one who comes ~picking flowers~ is so well describe by you sad but true.
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, M Morgan
(198) wrote:
Strange, but i have a feeling about this poem..... a memory perhaps....
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Yes, Mirna, it's a repost for new readers...
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
A silent sorrow falls within the soul. stunning write, blues and such a masterful inspiration too, bravo****
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On Wednesday, November 13, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
cold and very scary cause this happens more often than not. wonderful write Blue