Soul to Keep
By andhaka
Damp mulch under her bare feet
Beneath the shadows on an ivory sheet
She awaited the reaper to take her home
In the heavens her soul to roam
Belligerent winds bid her warning
Fog drifting in giving its mourning
Sapphire eyes opened wide
Heaven doors had been denied
Satan crawled out of hell
Serenity and faith begun to quell
Echo’s arose from her shriek
The devil had taken her soul to keep
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Copyright 2013 andhaka
Published on Tuesday, April 23, 2013.
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On Monday, June 10, 2013, Deathkitten
(571) wrote:
Sapphire eyes opened wide Heaven doors had been denied Satan crawled out of hell Serenity and faith begun to quell...I love those lines. I like the dark twist & flow of this. You did an awesome job on this piece. Cheers to an everlasting firey hell :)
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On Monday, June 10, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
haha thanks i'm glad you enjoyed : )
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On Tuesday, June 4, 2013, Melancholic VIncent
(428) wrote:
At the beginning you manage to create in my head the image of a swamp. I don't know if it's there or not. I'd say you feel you belong more to hell than heaven. What would make you feel that, I wonder....
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On Tuesday, June 4, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
A lot of things actually make me believe that i'm not fitting for a place filled with angels haha and you're right when i wrote this poem i was going for a swampy / forest like feel. It's really cool that you caught onto that. Thanks for commenting : )
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A former member wrote:
This is a nice piece. I love how instead of God it's the Devil taking your soul. I understand how it can feel that way
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On Saturday, May 25, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
Thanks i'm glad you liked it : )
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On Saturday, May 25, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
Thanks everyone for commenting i'm glad y'all enjoyed this piece.
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On Saturday, May 25, 2013, Kristoff
(37) wrote:
Sounds accurate enough to be an image if humanity... I love it XD
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A former member wrote:
A nice theme on the nature of humanity if one has bit of a pessimistic point of view... I like it.
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A former member wrote:
nice little twisted rhyme...