Soul to Keep

By andhaka

 Damp mulch under her bare feet

Beneath the shadows on an ivory sheet

She awaited the reaper to take her home

In the heavens her soul to roam

 

Belligerent winds bid her warning

Fog drifting in giving its mourning

Sapphire eyes opened wide

Heaven doors had been denied

 

Satan crawled out of hell

Serenity and faith begun to quell

Echo’s arose from her shriek

The devil had taken her soul to keep

 

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Copyright 2013 andhaka
Published on Tuesday, April 23, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Deathkitten On Monday, June 10, 2013, Deathkitten (626)By person wrote:

    Sapphire eyes opened wide Heaven doors had been denied Satan crawled out of hell Serenity and faith begun to quell...I love those lines. I like the dark twist & flow of this. You did an awesome job on this piece. Cheers to an everlasting firey hell :)

  • andhaka On Monday, June 10, 2013, andhaka (205)By person wrote:

    haha thanks i'm glad you enjoyed : )

  • River Lily On Saturday, June 8, 2013, River Lily (1162)By person wrote:

    Love how it all flowed perfectly together, Dark and beautiful imagery. Nicely written. :) Scholar

  • andhaka On Monday, June 10, 2013, andhaka (205)By person wrote:

    Thanks im glad you liked it :)

  • Melancholic VIncent On Tuesday, June 4, 2013, Melancholic VIncent (532)By person wrote:

    At the beginning you manage to create in my head the image of a swamp. I don't know if it's there or not. I'd say you feel you belong more to hell than heaven. What would make you feel that, I wonder....

  • andhaka On Tuesday, June 4, 2013, andhaka (205)By person wrote:

    A lot of things actually make me believe that i'm not fitting for a place filled with angels haha and you're right when i wrote this poem i was going for a swampy / forest like feel. It's really cool that you caught onto that. Thanks for commenting : )

  • A former member wrote: This is a nice piece. I love how instead of God it's the Devil taking your soul. I understand how it can feel that way

  • andhaka On Saturday, May 25, 2013, andhaka (205)By person wrote:

    Thanks i'm glad you liked it : )

  • andhaka On Saturday, May 25, 2013, andhaka (205)By person wrote:

    Thanks everyone for commenting i'm glad y'all enjoyed this piece.

  • Kristoff On Saturday, May 25, 2013, Kristoff (51)By person wrote:

    Sounds accurate enough to be an image if humanity... I love it XD

  • A former member wrote: A nice theme on the nature of humanity if one has bit of a pessimistic point of view... I like it.

  • A former member wrote: nice little twisted rhyme...

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