The Baby Mouse

By devilsrighthand

 My Heart was like a small, baby mouse.
You were like the Talon of a great golden eagle.
Whenever you wanted something from me, you would squeeze with your vice like grip.
Getting whatever you wanted from me.
I did anything, I did everything.
Until that day where you slid your razor sharp claw across the innocent babies throat,
spilling every drop of its blood.
You played with it too roughly.    
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
And you broke it.

Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited. Ask the author first.
Copyright 2013 devilsrighthand
Published on Wednesday, February 27, 2013.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

This was something I came up within about 30 seconds
Log In or Join (free) to see the special features here.

Comments on "The Baby Mouse"

Log in to post comments.
  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, April 25, 2018, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Absolutely savage metaphor that doesn't hold back in the pursuit of telling an unflinching truth.

  • Fallenfromgrace On Wednesday, October 16, 2013, Fallenfromgrace (103)By person wrote:

    I was adopted but my biological parents were always in my life, My mother is like the eagle to me... once again, Great write.

  • A former member wrote: mice are cute. *gives your heart a full body cast* it'll be better in no time. this is good, royce. interesting choice of metaphor, thoroughly explored. potent feeling.

  • Ravenblade On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Ravenblade (307)By person wrote:

    This takes me back to a much younger, angrier part of my life...sometimes its good to reminisce...perhaps this is just what I needed.

  • A former member wrote: Amazing and short you really came up within 30 seconds? good work and wonderful write love the use of the baby mouse and the eagle

  • A former member wrote: Well this poem just resounds in my head over and over, I love the metaphors and the fact you described the way that people with power or people that are plain ff ups treat others....indeed a talon of an eagle. Great piece, really enjoyed reading it!

  • BetaWolfinVA On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791)By person wrote:

    Loved this... love the metaphore... well executed Scholar

  • Dei On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, Dei (663)By person wrote:

    awe. Poor mouse heart. This was adorable and vicious and sad all at once.

  • A former member wrote: i like it i like the flow the metphore is a good one see you shouldn't doubt yourself becase you are good i look forward to more by you

Contribution Level

devilsrighthand's Favorite Poets
Share/Save This Post



Join DarkPoetry Join to get a profile like this for yourself. It's quick and free.

How to Criticize Without Causing Offense
© 1998-2024 DarkPoetry LLC
Donate
[Join (free)]    [More Poetry]    [Get Help]    [Our Poets]    [Read Poems]    [Terms & Privacy]

Attention: Darkpoetry is now in maintenance mode and will be shutting down soon. Save your work if you wish to keep it.