Untitled
By AshtrayDirt
You want warm blood
String me up,
blue,purple tinged feet wrigling in my vision
Walk past me in your quiet conversation
fill
me ahhh ah ohh ohh
I saw graveyards, so sensitive,
turn back, they're lonely.
doused in red, lay me down
ah the eyes, 6 feet underground
Dark light bordering your bolted door
put your weight down,it comes through,
can't be seen by your little babies eyes
ah your little babies eyes
you had to be someone to her.
A drunken punchout.
i dont.
know.
why.
i.
die.
inside.
at.your.
time.
chewing and waiting,
skanky fridge and a drunk complexion.
live in the unknown to preserve your flesh
don't put your ow bones on the bridge
easy, dig a hole.
Hit me, let me fall back
put me inside
let me turn black.
drag myself out with the cats.
Pin me on the wall, speculate, spit
dont put me inside, put me inside, don't put me inside,
don't don't don't don't
put me inside
throbbing brain forcing itself against the infastructure of my skull.
You crazy rose.
Comments on "Untitled"
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On Friday, March 24, 2006, monalisamarie
(113) wrote:
i like it...i love it, nice write....~
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On Monday, May 17, 2004, Mute Serenade
(389) wrote:
your poetry makes me feels as though every hint of air is gone... and i am gasping to have your glamour.... Sue
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A former member wrote:
i should of known that it would be interesting..just looking at your name.. ashtraydirt.
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On Thursday, November 27, 2003, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Thought provoking in its vagueness. still, very emotional. brilliant wording. You have a talent.
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On Friday, September 12, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
it flows, but not smoothly... jerky, it jolts and flashes in my head. i like that. some of your phrasings in here are phenominal. :D
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A former member wrote:
kewl I liked the words and the confusion I felt at every word made me think
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, worm
(1149) wrote:
well I got to admit that this one caught me by surprise! I still don't know what to say... but I just had to say something! thanks for making me think!
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A former member wrote:
I die inside...at your time....I like this. the poem is really exciting...
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On Friday, August 15, 2003, Stranger
(263) wrote:
This poem grabbed me by the back of my head and smacked it against brick wall. Thank you; I needed that.
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A former member wrote:
Interesting.
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On Saturday, July 12, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
i wish i could understand poems like this one. it would make them more beautiful. -B
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A former member wrote:
this is weird... i liked it. "a drunken punchout" was a particularly neat line.. not sure what it means, but like it alot. welcome to DP.