Your Shadows
By Quietus
You look past the woods to the darkness beyond
The withering shadows whisper your name
“Shh” they say
“Don’t make a sound, for we are the shadows who consume the darkest realms of your mind.”
“We scratch our names in your arms and paralyze your thoughts, for we are the shadows who watch you at night.”
You try to run but you don’t get very far
The insidious shadows appear beside you each time
“Don’t be afraid” they say
“Don’t try to fight, for we are the shadows who control your being.”
“We play with your strings and make you do evil things, for we are the shadows who live in your mind.”
You try to stay pure but the crave is overwhelming, like an itch you can’t scratch.
The vile shadows cut your wrists and watch you bleed
“See, you like it” they say
“Don’t try to hide the smile in your eyes, for we are the shadows who concede in you’re addiction.”
“We live in your sorrow and enjoy your pain, for we are simply…you.”
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Comments on "Your Shadows "
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A former member wrote:
i loved this peice very nice personal deseption amazing
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A former member wrote:
Powerful piece of free floating thoughts...well said...these dark shadows keep on searching for our weakness hidden inside our mind..so that they can captivate our thoughts easily ..
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Ladyhawke
(392) wrote:
Loved it. I like the story-ish quality about it. I'd like to read ur short stories. If they're even half this good, im up for em:) Keep it up, and welcome to DP:)
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Quietus
(75) wrote:
Thanks! Maybe I will post something later :)
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A former member wrote:
Loved it. Fantastic. Bloody perfect. Flippin' hell, this I never wanted to forget. You just made my night :) Thank you!
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Quietus
(75) wrote:
Really? Well, thanks! I never expected to get great comments :P
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Poetic-Realm
(253) wrote:
as I was trailing along this poem I though, "well what if the evil and deceptive shadows proved to be just you, your own deception feeding in?" but you tied it together right at the end just right, this was a good one definitely, an insanity swept dwelling into our 'pain' or lack there of, welcome to DP Quietus :]
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Quietus
(75) wrote:
Thank you! I usually write short stories but I just started poems. This one came out pretty good :)
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Poetic-Realm
(253) wrote:
I believe you can post short stories as well, so you should post them if you feel comfortable! and also, read the other peoples works, there are some brilliant minds plastered on the endless pages of the site and they may give you some insight into new areas of creativity :]
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2011, Quietus
(75) wrote:
I know, I did the "random poem" thing before I even joined, and the poems I read were amazing.