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It was a trap
By Miztaken4beauty
A shining blade.
But I don't care
Seems
I'm caught,
In your snare.
Take my head,
or keep my heart.
Rip my fucking
world
:+: apart:+:
But I bet,
You
don't know.
So will you just,
let me
-go?-
A trap
was set,
a
-victims-
role.
In this game,
I lack
:*:Control:*:
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Copyright 2010 Miztaken4beauty
Published on Saturday, August 21, 2010.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "It was a trap"
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A former member wrote:
The flow and rhyme are flawless and the structure was interesting. I can feel anger and pain, but I can also feel a sense of defeat at the same time. This is very well written.
Krys
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On Sunday, August 22, 2010, urbanhumility
(1175)
wrote:
swift....and concise.....everything spelled out....., well done
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On Saturday, August 21, 2010, silentninja
(26) wrote:
A world of anger, and supression are the vibes I feel from this, the text suggests to me that for you it is often hard to get a word in edge ways. I love the use of th word 'fuck', so cold and dark; but at the same time, passionate and violent. awesome. I hope to read more from you.
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A former member wrote:
The blade of your pen is still as keen as ever I see. This was sharp and cut deep, much like the subject matter.--Draven.
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