.fogged.up.eyes.
By slow.burn.star
dreamer~
bending branches from the sun
and brightly colored melody transforms me
from the muted colors
of your ~kiss. switch. replay.
shining off reflections from the window.
Taking off like shadows from a bird in flight.
you're never where i need you.
and everything tastes bitter now. almost seventeen.
almost completely jaded. Drifter; pushing sidewalk cracks
and jumbled words. changing pace.
Just the first step, maybe not the last one.
hollowing. H e a v y rain.
the gleam in your eye is dusty. i cant take it back.
cant make you.
but i'll try. flashbacks. i'll remind you.
water beading down strands of my hair. blurry.
fogged up mirrors and white in the corners. slick-
red spattered on the tile.
.freezeframe.
you lost me. rewind. playback. fingertips touching.
electric humming. profile. parting lips with tip of tongue.
slow it down.
steam rising. five more minutes. can you fake it?
just one more line.
battling with my goodbye. you couldn't even promise me.
i'm burning my mouth. stop * -__
face framed.
i'm sorry every things for you.
now theres nothing for you
to brush a w a y...
Comments on ".fogged.up.eyes."
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A former member wrote:
yes---simply yes-----do this again. raw rarity.
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A former member wrote:
gorgeous poem. i LOVE it, it displays so much emotion.
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A former member wrote:
Beautifully written
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On Thursday, February 12, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
so beautiful, wonderfully writte, compelling...magnificent write. FF
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On Saturday, June 14, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
'Godamnit'GODAMNIT .you:*&^%$#@:!!! Pull the earth over my head and beat me to death with your words' :::sigh::: so beautiful ... so...... le pulchritudinous: Love Love [D&A]
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On Monday, June 9, 2003, Amanda Parnell
(57) wrote:
Wow, that is so beautiful. I heard of you from someone, but I can;t remember who. Well, they told me my style merinds them of you. You're so much better. Thanks. *kitten*
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Mesmerizing. The flow and pattern of this was simply perfect. ~ mw
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, silent_screams
(11) wrote:
beautiful - i dig the pace of this, i i lost myself while reading it; it takes strong things for that to happen. and the imagery is amazing.
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A former member wrote:
Just breathtaking...such imagery...well done!!