Ambiguous Dawn
By Midnight Phoenix
(The topic of this piece was chosen by "alone". I struggled a little on
this one so bear with me! This one is for you alone!)
Cry… Inhale… Scream… Exhale… Smile
Rapid pulses and fiery eyes
Outshine the darkness and demise
All hollow air sweeps through my cries
Remaining so sentient remaining alive
….. but wait
Underneath the tears are loving thoughts
The rain is sweet and slowly stops
The droplets trickle down my face
It’s warm inside this perfect place
….. but how
CAN THIS HAPPEN WITHOUT A WARNING
HOW CAN YOU LOVE ME WHILE I AM MOURNING
PLEASE DON’T SAY YOU’LL KNEEL BEFORE ME
I’LL SHUT YOU OUT BEFORE YOU IGNORE ME
….. but what
If this poison needs a wanton inducer
And stalemate is offered from winner to loser
Will this combination help to confuse or
Will I finally be free of myself and abuse
….. Smile
Comments on "Ambiguous Dawn"
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A former member wrote:
The poem had a very fast and powerful pace to it, I really enjoyed it.
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On Saturday, June 16, 2007, torn_beauty
(77) wrote:
oh wow. I think that you are just amazing with your words! even if you did struggle, it was well worth it.
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On Wednesday, June 15, 2005, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
it was so powerful....and just great. I love the style and feeling!
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On Wednesday, July 23, 2003, hate_doll
(263) wrote:
mm...I love the rhyme, and the subject is very powerful. Very well written :)
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On Monday, June 23, 2003, diavolessa
(207) wrote:
it was just so suden! wonderful at the same time! {Dk}
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A former member wrote:
AH ha that was amazing....You did a spectacular job...the words....you still write too much like me it often is a scary thought...oh well like i have said b4 i adore you!
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On Friday, May 30, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
I'll have to digest this one a while; interesting and masterfully written. ~ mw