(Untitled)

By BrokenButterflyWings

Roses rotting
on my wall
Humpty Dumpty
and his fall

in the future
lies the pit
from the poem
I had writ

who is the master?
who is the pet?
No one knows why,
things are set

What is the price
for which you'd sell your soul?
go ask Alice
for where is the rabbit hole.




- This was originally a very different poem, but it felt kind of clunky and repetitive to me, so I cut about half of it. Its untitled because the old title fit the part I cut. Once I decide if I like it this way, hopefully a fitting title will come to me. I'd love to hear feedback on it.

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© 2009 BrokenButterflyWings
Published on Sunday, August 16, 2009.     Filed under: "Philosophical" and "Poetry"
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  • Enigma On Saturday, July 10, 2010, Enigma (91)By person wrote:

    I liked it how it is right now..But I surely would have loved to have read it in full before the cut. Maybe you can post the un-edited version?

  • A former member wrote: i adore this!!!!! its not clunky it flows its not repetitive its persistant. i enjoy it quite a bit

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