Metal Wings Hurt/Under Lucid Sheets

By Revisable Retina

We only exist through fervent pulse.


We faded into transparent cranes
gaining the speed going....... nowhere
impetuously flying downwards

He had me aching for more
while I sat alone in that theater
The show, assuring you, it will all be fine

So I shut my eyes... imagining -home-
Foot Tap on the floor tap-tap-tap
The idea snaps

I arch my hips back..
the room begins to spin@@@
brass daybed keep me warm again.

cant I push my weight over his edges?
or the simplicity of flipping red petals
counting on tips of ten fingers.

steam evaporates from pressed shoulders
just letting go, just falling out... *Fell off*
body sway in that impulsive way from the meds we take

This isn't real... under lucid sheets
this will hurt you, more then me
I smiled, while I watched you cried
you flew away in between metal wings

-I stayed a world apart-

My back's in the grass
making me itch
I just lay there and think..... ALONE


We only exist through fervent pulse.

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© 2008 Revisable Retina
Published on Friday, November 28, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Dilated View On Thursday, January 7, 2010, Dilated View (583)By person wrote:

    had a very daydream-spaceout feel to it that I enjoyed. Lost in the moment. Interesting, thanks for sharing.

  • A former member wrote: a mind cramp from working a thought into lactic despair...left empty and plural.

  • A former member wrote: this was very good. ~ hdb.

  • A former member wrote: Nice. Good use of adjectives and verbs.

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