Flatline

By TheUltimateOutlaw

We faded away like the

Pulse—

Of our daydreams;

A passing

Gasp—

For air at sunset;

On the vermilion

Ebb—

Of my nightmares;

I listened for the

Beat—

Of our hearts;

But they were

Still—

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© 2008 TheUltimateOutlaw
Published on Monday, November 10, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Sketso On Tuesday, November 11, 2008, Sketso (416)By person wrote:

    the abrupt interruptions, exactly the way a slowing heartbeat would slaughter the senses, leaving a hope that just one more... bravo!

  • Fantecstasy On Monday, November 10, 2008, Fantecstasy (120)By person wrote:

    You conducted the words wonderfully, even to the harshest places they explored. Really liked the style/theme, creative and well done. *tips hat*

  • heroineyes On Monday, November 10, 2008, heroineyes (111)By person wrote:

    i loved this...the way it flowed and feelings os silence...truly represents the lack of heartbeat

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