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Killing You Was The Solution To My Misery
By Dark Goth
Her unshakable belief in a blissful afterlife
allowed her to meet her quietus without the
slightest tinge of fear or regret
Onyx clouds blinded the sky
It was time for her to die!
The stage was set in blood!
This dark story ends tonight
In his mind, blood came before anything else
Come my sweet black goddess join me in feast
Dark candle light then erase her dying sight
After hours of torment for her breath ceased
His hate greatly accelerated during and after vicious pogroms
against the bitch that treated him immorally
To the black count swore
He would kill this whore
Her dreams present a phantasmagoria of pains and suffering
Cursed together their dreams become their one own weakling
Conjouring up a cold dark ritual needed to complete this curse
Leaving her there to die in her blood will complete this verse
O sweet beauty I wish I could spare your life
I hope this gift will let you see how much my love you mean to me
You see I am flawed and hate hurting you
more than anything in the world
Yet nothing pleases me more than killing you with this knife
Ebony died in macabre twilight
Salvation will take all flight
It seems too macabre to suggest that she was a mourner at another funeral
stricken down suddenly on the platform and promptly buried!
Without her my twisted soul can no longer fly
Cannot see, darkness rips at my blinding eyes
He gazes in her eyes while she lies dead in a bloody mess
under bright full moon
Beautiful colored scarlet with a purple eye in pairs that close
in the afternoon
Gazing at the scene of the bloody savagery
Killing You Was The Solution To My Misery
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© 2008 Dark Goth
Comments on "Killing You Was The Solution To My Misery"
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A former member wrote:
Personally...I could vividly see this happen as I sat and read. Nicely done-will this be set to music for future CD's?~~ I want it!
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On Wednesday, June 4, 2008, SilentStalker
(1066)
wrote:
...as far as content, it sets the stage kinda nicely, but a lot of it seems forced , erratic, ans sometimes repetitive, and it seemed as if you were torn between using a rhyme scheme and going free verse...
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On Wednesday, June 4, 2008, Dark Goth
(43) wrote:
hey silent you could've put all that into one comment. they do make enough room for all that to fit. just in case you didn't know. just a helpful tip. and thanks for the feedback and yeah it basically sets the stage to lure someone into a trap.
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On Wednesday, June 4, 2008, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...apologies...Matt has us older members traumatized by the previous 256 character count limit of comments; it's a habit to cut my comments off around that length by nature now, unless I truly get carried away...
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On Wednesday, June 4, 2008, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...I think it's obvious the title would draw someone like me in; and the use of it as the closing line is exceptional; just remember to make the poem impact just as good, if not better, than the closing line, in such a case...
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On Tuesday, June 3, 2008, Dark Goth
(43) wrote:
I'm writing 10 Death poems. This is 1 of 10.
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On Wednesday, June 4, 2008, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...funny; I never actually set a numerical goal; I just kept going until I ran out of ideas...maybe that might be a better approach, but don't let me sway you from whatever it is you're trying to prove...
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On Tuesday, June 3, 2008, Dancing_Monkey
(1246) wrote:
sounds like something a dark goth person would do.. ill make sure to read them
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