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Infernal Fiends Internal
By CorruptedLittleGirl
Insecurity internalized
Pushy bitch externalized
Push it back behind these eyes
Insecurity externalized.
Afraid to ask wherefores and whys
Feeling diminutive in mental size
And sadness lurks behind these eyes
Where indecision dormant lies
In anguish and in stifled cries
And infernal fiends internal try
To denigrating scars incise
And atrophy externalize.
When later spirit within me thrives
And decides to try its luck outside
The infernal fiends internal size
It up and see that they preside.
And forever stuck behind these eyes
Assertion, pride, and potential hide
Pale faces, frail, demoralized
Stifled behind this weary guise.
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© 2008 CorruptedLittleGirl
Published on Wednesday, May 14, 2008.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Infernal Fiends Internal"
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A former member wrote:
I really really liked this! Thanks for sharing it :)
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On Sunday, May 17, 2009, Carmina Gitana
(149)
wrote:
I love a good rhymed poem, and I really liked this one. However, since I really do feel like this has great potential (I don't comment where I see none), I have to pass on the advice of Steve Kowit (poet/workshopper) - awkward/archaic phrasing for the sake of a rhyme is rarely worth it. I could pinpoint the particular instances, but I already wonder if I've gone too far in my honesty :) I do hope you understand the spirit in which this comment is given - I think you have a pretty good beginning here, and it's great to see an intelligent rhyming poem here :)
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On Sunday, May 17, 2009, Stranger
(264) wrote:
I am pretty picky about poems that rhyme. But you did an amazing job here.
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A former member wrote:
Excellent flow and meter. I enjoyed this thoroughly. It's identifiable and wonderfully expressed. Great pen. Thanks for this. It's poetry like this that makes me have more faith in the rhyming way of things.
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A former member wrote:
good metaphore on being brave with our selves. Having the guts to put our inner self on the outside... that's rough for some of us.
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On Thursday, May 15, 2008, RubyXero
(484) wrote:
WOW!!!...that was ...fantastic. very descriptive..
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A former member wrote:
With expression like this, you should never feel "diminutive in mental size". No, more so inferior yet misunderstood. It's a magnificent poem. Love it.
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