I spent too much time among the shoreline.

By Armor for your life


I often wait for the ocean to speak.
I think it must be the most honest voice.

But I am easily distracted and
wander off
in between the grains of sand.
Counting them like stars, wishing
they could be treated the same.

[ironic. the wishing.]







I often wait for the ocean

Left still, and wanting.
and waiting

always waiting...

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© 2008 Armor for your life
Published on Monday, February 25, 2008.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, November 16, 2014, TropicalSnowstorm (1772)By person wrote:

    There is so much beauty and depth to this piece. Very well done! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Pride Ed On Sunday, November 16, 2014, Pride Ed (111)By person wrote:

    I wish this person still logged in. There's some very excellent writing on this account!

  • Pride Ed On Sunday, November 16, 2014, Pride Ed (111)By person wrote:

    Wow! So haunting, yet beautiful. It's raw and elegant at the same time.

  • DarkLight On Tuesday, April 3, 2012, DarkLight (6)By person wrote:

    Heartfelt, a lovely poem. I love the line "Inbetween the grains of sand" so simple but really implies how lost you get on the beach as if you're no longer walking on the beach you're a part of it. Wonderful.

  • NikesRain On Wednesday, August 10, 2011, NikesRain (1339)By person wrote:

    beautiful and breaking... quietly said but deeply felt... wonderful piece

  • A former member wrote: THe break in the waves tells all the tale. -END

  • Carmina Gitana On Monday, February 25, 2008, Carmina Gitana (158)By person wrote:

    I think the first two lines are marvelous. But, I'll be honest, it feels like the rest of it was put together just to turn those first two into a full-fledged poem. I'd keep working on this, it has the potential to be a really meaningful piece. (Hope you're OK with a critique - I mean well.)

  • Taunting The Reaper On Monday, February 25, 2008, Taunting The Reaper (188)By person wrote:

    I love the ambiance this creates. Ah yes... the endless ocean waiting..beautiful.

  • whisperer On Monday, February 25, 2008, whisperer (167)By person wrote:

    this write smacks of something powerful. i just wish it were longer

  • A former member wrote: the ocean is just the moon's translator. it doesnt say any of it's own words.

  • Armor for your life On Monday, February 25, 2008, Armor for your life (9)By person wrote:

    ...yeah, thanks for letting me know that the ocean can't actually speak.

  • Niemand On Monday, February 25, 2008, Niemand (366)By person wrote:

    Always... Pure perfection... -Geisha

  • Six-Out On Monday, February 25, 2008, Six-Out (1481)By person wrote:

    yea, always. I love this.

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