Comments by dwells
- "Sounds mutual to me. Third stanza tripped me up a bit and last stanza(?) was a complete form change. Alabaster is one of my favorite words too, thanks."
Posted by dwells on "Secret Fire" by Evil Ash
- "Make that "depravity" (depraved) instead of "depravation" (deprived) which is actually "deprivation" mispelled? (you've got me doing it now)"
Posted by dwells on "Dark Embrace's" by Evil Ash
- "Ah yes, the hot mess of putrefaction makes for a messy romp with newly dead(HA) - nice write but still thinking on the inspiration, a glimpse into personal desire and depravation, perhaps?"
Posted by dwells on "Dark Embrace's" by Evil Ash
- "Stiff upper lip old chap, as they say in the old country. Sounds like women problems unless I miss my guess? Don't be too hard on yourself because it take two to tango (I prefer the cha-cha)."
Posted by dwells on "mistakes" by Evil Ash
- "Well-paced, taughtly wrought, and a very original story you tell. Two against the world, nice."
Posted by dwells on "dark to light" by Evil Ash
- ""keep in your heart and hold them close, all of those who matter most" my sentiments from an original poem I can't recall now; seems appropriate here."
Posted by dwells on "matter to no one" by Evil Ash
- "So that was you looking in my bedroom window last night! Well done all around and without a ...ck to be found."
Posted by dwells on "passions" by Evil Ash
- "Hey E.A. - glad I don't have to do your laundry and I'd recommend a stress test for that heart condition. Seriously, got me thinking in several different directions through the entire piece; with a bit of confessional near the end - very nice."
Posted by dwells on "moment in pain" by Evil Ash
- "Too many images for me to comprehend without a six pack (or two); if ever. Maybe it's just me but you sling adjectives and phrases around like weapons, in a tour de force destined for the ionosphere. Please simplify things for the masses, because your effort needs greater reward than artistic style. Your poetry is like a shotgun looking for a target. Improve your aim and focus because you are so close...Then again you could be a genius and I'm only a dumbass? We all want the best for you - sorry if it stings."
Posted by dwells on "Indigo child" by Evil Ash
