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- "Life isn't perfect, but acceptance can be. Real love, real unity creates a conduit through which either intense joy or intense pain can flow. When we love, we open ourselves to the possibility of that pain. You chose to love, to risk, to be alive. Live well, risk everything. Thanks for that excellent write, and insight into the deep parts of the heart most people neglect."
Posted by Scarrzz on "It was real" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "I love a good rhymed poem, and I really liked this one. However, since I really do feel like this has great potential (I don't comment where I see none), I have to pass on the advice of Steve Kowit (poet/workshopper) - awkward/archaic phrasing for the sake of a rhyme is rarely worth it. I could pinpoint the particular instances, but I already wonder if I've gone too far in my honesty :) I do hope you understand the spirit in which this comment is given - I think you have a pretty good beginning here, and it's great to see an intelligent rhyming poem here :) "
Posted by Carmina Gitana on "Infernal Fiends Internal" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "Very nice. Its the passion that u felt, but without the connection that could last a lifetime.. Perfect is what suits you best for a lifetime, not for a moment. Good work darlin.. I like the feeling u put into this. :)"
Posted by j-rod on "It was real" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "troth being a medieval term for truth, as in loyalty or to be true,... where betrothed originates... there is a moral truth to this, is what I meant."
Posted by Unknown on "Terminal" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "your work is a bit negative... what I see is a crowd of people, acting as a ocean, waving and bobbing.. I get on top of them and surf on them... YAY! Bleh! "
Posted by Unknown on "Terminal" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "That sounds like a terminal condition... forgive the pun. I like the last image... not just for the weight of the animal chosen, which adds to the seriousness of the closure, but because I've always felt there is more to the elephant... not just mythos, but also social development... and knowing when it's dying, of course, when the death is natural. It is a wonder to feel higher and to be trampled as well. Great commentary here... vivid and full of troth. "
Posted by Unknown on "Terminal" by CorruptedLittleGirl
- "Excellent flow and meter. I enjoyed this thoroughly. It's identifiable and wonderfully expressed. Great pen. Thanks for this. It's poetry like this that makes me have more faith in the rhyming way of things."
Posted by Unknown on "Infernal Fiends Internal" by CorruptedLittleGirl
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