Comments by All Members
- "Wow... it's so emotional and scary. I know how you feel. I can relate easily. Keep writing!"
Posted by Unknown on "free" by firecracker
- "very cool, well done... good emotional content... I am going to throw some Ideas at you because you have the talent... change no to but, 1st line... run your pieces through a spell checker...
example, escapse... you do good work, write on "
Posted by Malcholm Dark on "beaten and bruised" by firecracker
- "when i read this ... i feel so much rage on those f*#kin ass freaks out there .. who just need to know how its like being the other side ... no one should be treated like that ... gr8 write u got me "
Posted by Unknown on "beaten and bruised" by firecracker
- "The whispers from the grave are often irresistible, tempting a shattered soul to join them. Very dark piece, well done, thanks for sharing."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "My crypt" by firecracker
- "I think you should reach inside yourself and call out every instant of your times with this person. It seems you need to vent a lot more. Though short descriptions can say enough. Beautiful write."
Posted by Unknown on "idk" by firecracker
- "Such a dark piece ..... Just got to write it all out and you will subdue the demons that bind you ..... Write On :)"
Posted by theXkevorkian on "My crypt" by firecracker
- "I do not agree I do not feel any words are lost or missing .... It is abstract and raw and leaves a lil for the imagination ... Nice Work Welcome to DP .... Write Oh :)"
Posted by theXkevorkian on "Unknow" by firecracker
- "in this short format you really make the most of each line - a work absolutely replete with a profound sense of the tragic - brilliant work & welcome to DP"
Posted by Riven Waker on "My crypt" by firecracker
- "This was like being thrown through a wood chipper and coming out the other side hoping you can rest easily now. Interesting read."
Posted by Dilated View on "memory" by firecracker
- "Short piece but I like it .... Captured my attention ... The last line I felt could of used a lil work ... But all and all Excellent write ... Welcome To DP ..... Write On :)"
Posted by theXkevorkian on "The show" by firecracker
- "nicely done, I enjoyed your use of the english language and the concrete syle . One thing, and its just me, in the second to the last line you made a refrence to "they". Please reply and let me know who they are."
Posted by Malcholm Dark on "The show" by firecracker
- "Your subject was very good. Although
your attempt to put it into words ended
up on the short end. It was a difficult
read because you forgot words.
Example: Desire conjures that which is worthwhile,,, you forgot 'that'
You tend to put a lot of ideas on one line, which is fine, Without the puncuation to seerate them the reader loses the full meaning of what you had to say.
I hope you don't think was being hard. I think the talent is there you just need a little help. fix it up and write-on."
Posted by Malcholm Dark on "Unknow" by firecracker
