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- "You guys are definitely going to give everyone a run for their money. This just seals the whole poem: "and leaves me nothing but an afterglow of love;
a mere cinder scintilla,
kindled by your hand." Magnificent fusion of writers.
"
Posted by ALBATROSS on "Volatile Conductivity" by CjPsychotic
- "Amazing. You take what's such mundane, even tedious, subject matter and turn it into an amazing piece of well-structured poetry. I love this. And it helps that I feel like the little invaders have outgunned me at the moment..."
Posted by Unknown on "...I'm Sick...." by CjPsychotic
- "No, sir. It isn't... but I wasn't quite sure how to respond. I did like it though.. it left me rather speechless. Such was the point of the '...' Many apologies for not coming back and elaborating on that. "
Posted by Unknown on "Alice in Wonder-bras" by CjPsychotic
- "Hahahah this is hilarious! It's a great poem. I feel sorry for those who got the flu vaccine, I don't think it works. Plus we all know the bird flu was manufactured and there's something else to that, kind of forget. Great poem."
Posted by Unknown on "...I'm Sick...." by CjPsychotic
- "oh fuck yes! provocative imagery like "the glow like an eels erection" always wraps itself snugly around my mind like a pearl necklace ;) I love this hot and bothered tumble down the ol' rabbit hole....we're all mad here, aren't we?"
Posted by Unknown on "Alice in Wonder-bras" by CjPsychotic
- "a descriptive smorgasborg,..i never stopped feasting from go2woe,..also i never really took this as a 2 hand write,..unless titled as 'collab' i'd have taken it as one write by one poet,...well done and good luck."
Posted by Unknown on "Volatile Conductivity" by CjPsychotic
- "The fourth and fifth stanzas on this could easily have stood alone for me- though the entire piece was excellently wrought. (your thirst for collateral damage/has become a fire inside me) slapped me across the face. Powerful image. Well done you two!!"
Posted by ebonyamore on "Volatile Conductivity" by CjPsychotic
- "*laughs* this is the sort of mad-hatter poetry I can really get behind because, honestly, who writes a sonnet to the flu? Huge points for creativity on this one. And AGAIN...your word choices are spot on. I loooved the entire closing stanza. and the phrase viral vapor laced with pain. My one true critique? Its nitpicky again but I love free verse poetry and I love Shakespearean sonnets equally as much. But to me, let your free verse be free verse and let your rhymed and metered stanzas follow hard and fast their mathematical formulas. To me, rhymed poem should have a slightly tighter cadence. But again...just me. "
Posted by ebonyamore on "...I'm Sick...." by CjPsychotic
- "i don't know why, but the phrase arbor canvas brought tears to my eyes. There's honestly nothing I could tell you to do to improve this piece except to submit it to every publication that accepts artistic contributions and be proud of these words. they're truly your brainchild and there's not a misstep among them. they lit up my night. "
Posted by ebonyamore on "An Honoring Toast" by CjPsychotic
- "this has an undeniable thread of brilliance woven all through it. your word choices are intuitive and ballsy. the entire first stanza is perfect. the second is great although, honestly, sorry just doesn't seem to fit. there's nothing sorry about this...either by way of apologetic or pathetic. the third stanza/couplet is great too and my favorite part of the entire thing happens in the fourth stanza...the first four lines. my only real suggestion to you other than the one word that just seems so out of place is that i kept feeling like this was TRYING really hard to have a rhyme and rhythm to it...like it wanted to be the bull's hoofbeats charging the ground thunderously but some of the time it got in its own way. you might want to play with it just a little to see if you can pin down a rhythm. not that the words themselves need it, but it seems like its there, just beneath the surface of the words already.
cheers,
~amore"
Posted by ebonyamore on "Matador's Outfit" by CjPsychotic
- "divinely stated and summated. . this is a building thing. a solid piece of writing and a beautifully woven alliterative piece. each stepping lightly to the apex. welcomes."
Posted by Unknown on "An Honoring Toast" by CjPsychotic
- "write, poet, write...poetics like this get me riled up and that's no easy feat.I simply adore the 'bring it on' feel to the entire piece...as for ripping this to shreds, I can't..this is one of my fave's from you thus far...you better upgrade and stick around!"
Posted by Unknown on "Matador's Outfit" by CjPsychotic
- "Mozzeltoff, man. Top off your glass. On me this time. The Mabstress fished out one of my favorite lines. "I am...
The textual rememberances of a sapien's dwindling pilgrimage." That's another one. Killer, killer piece. Welcome to Darkpoetry, if I haven't said it before. Now get in that postcard so you can stick around and share some more. :) Write on."
Posted by Alanarchy on "An Honoring Toast" by CjPsychotic
- ""The omnipotent sire of a million ink stained children with bodies obsessively gnarled and misconstrued."...now that's some metaphorical milk ;)"
Posted by Unknown on "An Honoring Toast" by CjPsychotic
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