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Matador's Outfit
By CjPsychotic
Toro, mother fucker, toro.
Grant me penance for my puns
As I scream into your face: BULL SHIT.
Its suspiciously sorry
How the veins of your hipocracy
Lay such ardent claims
To a misplaced aristocracy.
It's called a double standard
You pious, self-rightious bastards.
You vandalise your own beliefs:
Obsequiously promoting
The omnipotence of self and god,
Forever gloating
About the high ground you bravely
Stand on with boots
Forged from the skins of those
Marked as loots
Taken from the carcasses
Of your generous charity.
Charge, mother fucker, charge.
I'm untouched by your judgements
and the ever dulling horns of your bull shit.
This spear so arrogantly held above my head,
Will be piercing through yours. My charity. YOU'RE DEAD
(this is something new for me entirely so please rip it to shreds. Help
me get better :) Thanks)
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© 2009 CjPsychotic
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On Saturday, April 11, 2009, ebonyamore
(100)
wrote:
this has an undeniable thread of brilliance woven all through it. your word choices are intuitive and ballsy. the entire first stanza is perfect. the second is great although, honestly, sorry just doesn't seem to fit. there's nothing sorry about this...either by way of apologetic or pathetic. the third stanza/couplet is great too and my favorite part of the entire thing happens in the fourth stanza...the first four lines. my only real suggestion to you other than the one word that just seems so out of place is that i kept feeling like this was TRYING really hard to have a rhyme and rhythm to it...like it wanted to be the bull's hoofbeats charging the ground thunderously but some of the time it got in its own way. you might want to play with it just a little to see if you can pin down a rhythm. not that the words themselves need it, but it seems like its there, just beneath the surface of the words already. cheers, ~amore
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A former member wrote:
write, poet, write...poetics like this get me riled up and that's no easy feat.I simply adore the 'bring it on' feel to the entire piece...as for ripping this to shreds, I can't..this is one of my fave's from you thus far...you better upgrade and stick around!
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On Thursday, March 19, 2009, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Yes if felt like courage and force, I enjoy reads like this.
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On Monday, March 16, 2009, Shortnlethal
(65) wrote:
In all honesty I really liked this poem. It had "Balls". This to me was a enjoyment to read. looking forward to reading more of your work. ^^
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