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The Risk
By up_at_five
I wonder thru these dark filled times
and hope to lighten up these rhymes
For darkness fills a part of me
But thru this fog a hand I see
reaching out thru bog and night
Grabbing on with all its might
Pulling me to god knows where
I hope I pray but dare I dream
To lay beside that cool sweet stream
A willow cast a shadow on
My life my love my future Dawn
Oh should I light my heart a-blaze
Or will I wonder through this maze
To find the hole and patch again
and reach a path to find me Whole
Oh love of mine I do so hope
To find a road that leads to you
To share a love thats oh so true
My life before I bid ado
all I have I give to you
For Times before I have no care
For I am all I have to share
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© 2006 up_at_five
Comments on "The Risk"
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On Thursday, May 4, 2006, monalisamarie
(113)
wrote:
I love the rhythm that doesn't fade into a sing-song idiocy and the broken rhyme...nice work
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On Tuesday, May 2, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(564) wrote:
This was just insane and rocked my world!
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, Thorn
(283) wrote:
This poem has a certain ring to it... I can't quite put my finger on it, but I really like it. Crista is right, you are a very good poet.
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, CharlottesWeb
(511) wrote:
I agree with Stalker!!! I so rarely run across this form...and it is one of my favorites. I love this...everything about it wondyful. I want to read more...
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...holy crap, metre...! you actually know metre...! finally I see people out there that still know how to use that...
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...seeing this just made my day...
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
It's not hard to use. It's just not as fun, silly goose.
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...to some of us, it's more fun to make something out of pure structure; yeah, it's a dying art, but some of us strive to keep it breathing...
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
....i like....it's get much better towards the end....and i like the paragraph about the willow the most......keep it up dad :)
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
*stanza...not paragraph
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