Burying Us
By virginalnympho
Acidic tears burn through your lies
As they flow translucent down my broken soul
Scorching pass all the sad goodbyes
Leaving only the truth, black and cold
To you, I was just an object, nothing more
What i felt was a simple illusion, just a dream
So now I see clearly, lying bleeding on the floor
The death of a love not at all what it may seem
Covered in filthy memories of feigned emotion
A layer of pain forming a thick dust
There lies a broken dream of an undying devotion
That was killed along with all my trust
Sobbing over the corpse of all that i felt
Barely able to withhold the sorrow seeping from within
Watching hopes, wishes and dreams wither and melt
Vanishing but leaving reminants of bitter sin
As the last of us is buried deep in my heart
i force myself to realize it was for the best
Trying despertly not to fall apart
And ignore the pain lodged deep in my chest
Comments on "Burying Us"
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On Friday, March 24, 2006, Cassandra
(14) wrote:
Oh, and please, do ask if you'd like those suggestions!
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On Friday, March 24, 2006, Cassandra
(14) wrote:
I'm not sure if you're searching for any type of constructive criticism or not, or just general feedback. I won't give suggestions because I don't want to offend you - I did enjoy reading this, but I saw even more potential behind it.
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On Saturday, March 25, 2006, virginalnympho
(19) wrote:
i'm always open for suggestions
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On Monday, February 6, 2006, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Nice write. Burned me in a most pleasurable way. Killer title, too. Keep it up. Heheh. Your SN owns.