What you were
By Adam
You were, perfect, beautiful, and always nice
Now you’re a bitch,
a witch, and cold as ice
You were an inspiration, a dream
and my reason to live
Now you’re a fear, a cry and my reason to
die
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I loved you but I can’t any more
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Copyright 2011 Adam
Author's Note:
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A former member wrote:
This poem is so true.
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A former member wrote:
I really like this and can kinda relate .. I specially like the line " now you're a fear, a cry and a reason to die" good job :)
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On Saturday, January 26, 2008, Mari
(419) wrote:
that bitch, lol.
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On Sunday, May 14, 2006, Vexed
(74) wrote:
I like this place, the colours are nice and the poem is well written... but most girls can be like that, even a good chunk of guys too... my fave line was "you're a bitch, a witch, and cold as ice"
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On Monday, January 2, 2006, Darkest_Addiction
(44) wrote:
"Now you’re a fear, a cry and my reason to die" this is an amazing line, it was perfect
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On Sunday, January 1, 2006, sIo
(898) wrote:
wow that's harsh.
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On Thursday, December 29, 2005, Forgotten Angel
(309) wrote:
i've friends..of both sexes..that i could say this 2..this is an awesome write adam..sorry i havent commented on anything..but i hope you do know that i read and dont always comment... -Kel
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On Thursday, December 29, 2005, Adam
(242) wrote:
As do I and I dont exspect(sp) comments on everything
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On Sunday, December 4, 2005, Vexed
(74) wrote:
hehe, I know several guys who have gone through a relationship like that with one of my friends, hehe, sums it all up really neatly.
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On Saturday, December 3, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
very clear and concise in such few lines that i can totally relate to ^^. hehe great job. i like :)
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A former member wrote:
this is powerful stuff, u kno tha right? good job
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On Friday, December 2, 2005, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
....very powerful write adam....it shows your pain and hurt....keep it up...this new side of your writing is new, but really good....
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On Friday, January 20, 2006, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
....and i'm sorry to find that i was the one to inspire your pain....wish i had known......i'm so sorry...allthough i know words can't make up for the way i've made you feel,.....
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On Saturday, January 21, 2006, Adam
(242) wrote:
always remember that while i was "in pain then" what you have done for me...You were, perfect, beautiful, and always nice.... You were an inspiration, a dream and my reason to live... that is what you are to me, even when i try to hate you i cant do it
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On Thursday, December 1, 2005, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
*you were an inspiration, a dream and a rare beauty, now you're a fear, a cry, and just so damn ugly*, that's how i would write the second verse, i like it how it is thought so up to you
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On Saturday, December 3, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
either way it still sounds good :D
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On Sunday, January 1, 2006, Adam
(242) wrote:
And i do know that "cold as ice should not be used..." but it fit...