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Distructive Dispair
By veingo
To see her eyes fill with tears,
was like watching my most cherished
of possessions,
sinking into the swell of a flood.
So tragic, so terribly,
beautiful.
Here tears were like,
falling, crystalline, razors.
I couldn't catch them all.
They tore me apart.
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© 2005 veingo
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On Tuesday, August 10, 2010, Ladyhawke
(392)
wrote:
Oh my God! So sweet. Now only if every guy felt the same way about his girl. 'tears were like falling, crystalline razors', my god! Thats so touching. Very good! write on
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A former member wrote:
*her*... I really think you should return man and post some more. This was so subtle, so tender, and the vision... the vision simply pure. kudos! Write some more!
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A former member wrote:
I wish my tears had this effect on a certain someone.
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A former member wrote:
this blew me away...the last 4 lines are crushing!
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On Tuesday, December 27, 2005, CrestfallenTears
(17) wrote:
oh my, this is depressing, but very beautiful. Greatwork.
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A former member wrote:
Sadness hurts.
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A former member wrote:
oh my, ^V^, your words always seem to pull at me from somewhere deep. great work again, ..~A~
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A former member wrote:
This is wonderful. So much packed into so few lines...absolutely beautiful. ~Lost~
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A former member wrote:
your descriptions of tears were chilling and powerful..i am in awe of that imagery- "faling,crystalline,
razors"- beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
such a wondrous metaphor. .. excellently tragic
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On Sunday, October 30, 2005, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
This right here...this is simplistic beauty at its finest.
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A former member wrote:
Oh my...this is so heartbreaking...if only I could take a squeegie (sp?) and wipe away her tears for you...then I would not have to witness your heart tearing itself to pieces as mine so often does. Beautiful write...*Evangel*
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On Sunday, October 30, 2005, Err0r
(358) wrote:
So ...aggravating. I both love this and hate it at the same time. It's like one big ball of Irony grr. I love this. yes. I've decided. Wonderful write. :D
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On Sunday, October 30, 2005, little butterfly
(36) wrote:
this is sad but it was written beautifully
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