No reason. Part 2

By veingo

I tried to make you love me.

To be the perfect man.

I tried so hard to be all that you need.



I tried to make you love me.

To make you understand.

That you were all the world and more, to me.
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(A magical feeling.)
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I wanted nothing more,


than to be with you.

than to serve you.

to provide for you.

to worship you.
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( A magical failing)
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You called me,


simple.

without ambition.

content.

a coward.



I guess I'm not enough.

I guess I've failed again.

I guess I'll never be the one for you.



But don't stop reading yet.

Come back again, my pretty.

I think I have one more poem for you.




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© 2005 veingo
Published on Friday, October 28, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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Comments on "No reason. Part 2"

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  • CjPsychotic On Sunday, March 15, 2009, CjPsychotic (30)By person wrote:

    for a piece so immensely filled with deep emotions, it drops just short of bland. Excuse the harshness but it seems to me that cold-bitterness and just plain dryness are radically different.

  • A former member wrote: This is excellent. I'm digging it. Not just the cliffhanger, this whole thing was good. Can't wait for the next.

  • Myrrhkuri the fallen one On Saturday, November 19, 2005, Myrrhkuri the fallen one (94)By person wrote:

    you are beyond words!!I'd loved to have met you early in my troubled life!

  • A former member wrote: I'd come back, but then again, write or read your words, your heart and soul out like this to me, and I would never leave WOW.. you take my breath away ^V^, ...~A~

  • A former member wrote: i love the contrast between part one and part two..but i must say, i think i liked this one the best..it's filled with a bitter that chills my bones. the ending was perf. i can't wait for part three. =)

  • Army Barbie On Thursday, November 10, 2005, Army Barbie (324)By person wrote:

    Man, I like this better than Part 1 I think. "Come back again, my pretty. I think I have one more poem for you." Man oh man, that's hot. I love it, dah'lin.

  • veingo On Thursday, November 10, 2005, veingo (533)By person wrote:

    Hehe, stick around if you really want to here un-nice things. There will be a part 3.

  • Army Barbie On Friday, November 11, 2005, Army Barbie (324)By person wrote:

    Utoh. That almost scares me. I like to hear nice things! But to hear something unkind from you...is worth waiting for.

  • A former member wrote: such convincing desperation; [i'd come back :)] i love the inner trappings of rhyme and reasoning in this. .. ~ness

  • veingo On Saturday, October 29, 2005, veingo (533)By person wrote:

    Without rhyme, or reason, what would a poet have? ^V^


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