Come Alive

By Nail Bunny

The flame burns black
the candle dies
our lives play out
'neath angry skies

the melted wax,
like blood pools round
to the sound
of pain profound.

TICK








TOCK-TICK








TOCK

come the diseaded murmers
of a dying clock

a ghostly whisper,
an angry sound
the clink of human bones
echoes 'round

under blue skies,
no sound fills the halls
but the house comes alive
as darkness falls

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Copyright 2005 Nail Bunny
Published on Saturday, August 20, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • the dried flower On Saturday, October 15, 2005, the dried flower (67)By person wrote:

    ooooooo it is scary, i like.

  • Six-Out On Sunday, August 21, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    How about something not completely trite and overdone, like Darkness Falls is. How about since you spent the time to write this, you spend a few more minutes to title it. I can't stand that people would not title something worked so hard on.

  • Thorn On Wednesday, August 24, 2005, Thorn (283)By person wrote:

    I only suggested that because it happens to be the finalizing line of the poem.

  • Nail Bunny On Sunday, August 21, 2005, Nail Bunny (161)By person wrote:

    sorry, dude. it was late, i was drained. I'll keep it in mind next time...

  • Thorn On Saturday, August 20, 2005, Thorn (283)By person wrote:

    Pretty good. How about "darkness falls" for a title?

  • sIo On Saturday, August 20, 2005, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    this wasn't bad.

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