Millimetre No. 9

By island warrior

You went out of your way
To hurt me today
You shouldn't have done it
Now it's my turn to play

The gates are open
Let the games begin
Evil has awoken
No one can win

You may pray for mercy
There's none in me
Buttons were pushed
Strikes number three

I tried to warn you
You wouldn't listen then
It's too late now
It's not if but when

So when you're walkin' down the street
Remember to look behind
Cutting throught the darkness
Millimetre No. 9

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Copyright 2005 island warrior
Published on Monday, January 31, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This is absolutely amazing. multiple people have gone out of their way to hurt me. thak you for this poem.

  • A former member wrote: such hatred and spite. love ittt!!!!!!!!!!

  • Winter Born On Tuesday, November 17, 2009, Winter Born (169)By person wrote:

    hatred and rage with such musical eloquence! I love it!

  • A former member wrote: very intense and pulsing...the rhythm is great. good job ~Tamara

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, March 16, 2005, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    Loved it - great twist on the Love Potion song! : ) Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • HiImFromJupiter On Saturday, March 5, 2005, HiImFromJupiter (11)By person wrote:

    So vicious, I love vicious.....

  • Lotophagi On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    biting.... this moves so quickly..... great imagery, and I love the concept. Rocking piece. Thank you.

  • VenomPlease On Monday, February 7, 2005, VenomPlease (134)By person wrote:

    I like this. There's kind of a sickness about the whole thing. Very cool.

  • ardneK On Monday, January 31, 2005, ardneK (72)By person wrote:

    I'd have to agree with Ani, though it is simplistic form, it captures your emotion perfectly and is intense - >|

  • AniDayz On Monday, January 31, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    *catches breath* this is intense. the first stanza is an exceptional introduction to this. the flow is so rhythmic, its all echoeing in my brain. very well written and expressed.

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