Incredible Cliche
By Im_going_to_cry_now
I wish I could start this story off with a bang, some glimpse of a bleak
future that I could flashback from, or this profound foreshadowy thing,
a sort of best of times/ worst of times thing. but I can't, and even if
I could it wouldn't be right. The truth is it just started with a sad lonely
girl crying in her room.
and I can't say why she cried, she had never told us. But I knew on
some subconscious level that some heartless person had been too careless
with words and had produced the salty water that ran now down her cheek.
and I can't say how many times it happened before.It was a number that
God himself would have to count on his fingers. Someone would say the wrong
thing and her happiness would shatter like a bowl dropped from the side
of the Grand Canyon.
There isn't much I can say at all, but I can say that it was the last
time. Because she took her razor and dragged it across her wrists. And
her tears became tiny drops in a sea of blood.
I wisjh I could end this with a bang, some triumph over evil or a happily
ever after.More than anything I wish I could use one of those endings where
everything just keeps going, same as it was before, but I can't, it just
ended with a sad lonely girl crying in her room, who decided she hated
her life.
Comments on "Incredible Cliche"
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On Monday, February 7, 2005, Im_going_to_cry_now
(24) wrote:
He's got a point there has do be something really wrong in your life for you to go to that extreme don't judge someone until you've been there
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On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Lord Kalgalath
(182) wrote:
+looks at Elises comment and sighs+ Unless you have been to the point that nothing was stopping you from opening a vien to end the pain You have no call to say that, it looks that way from the outside yes. But have you ever thought how terrible the pain w
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On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
I've been there, so I'll say it. Suicide is the pussy's way out.
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A former member wrote:
suicide is only cowardly to those who arent strong enough to end the pain.
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On Saturday, May 7, 2011, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
And you're only stupid to those who can read and write.
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On Saturday, July 9, 2011, Doll Eyes
(124) wrote:
I think you're wrong. I also think that it's incredibly selfish to try to keep someone on this world if they don't want to be here. Suicide isn't for pussies. If you see a cancer patient crying in her hospital room, do you tell her to suck it up? I'd hope not. It's the same thing here. Just a metaphorical cancer that some people are strong enough to find the chemo for.
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On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Lord Kalgalath
(182) wrote:
Ok now that I have said that, Great work, though suicide is never really a pleasant subject.
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On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Lord Kalgalath
(182) wrote:
would have to be to completely override your will to live? To drive you to the point that not only do you no linger have the will to live, but in fact have the will to die, to take your own life, something that our very nature screams against.
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On Saturday, January 15, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(918) wrote:
terribly sad...i've been there before...~A
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On Sunday, January 9, 2005, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
Cheer up, mate. It's never so bad, once you get to know it better.
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On Tuesday, December 28, 2004, Elise
(188) wrote:
Sad story, if only she knew suicide was the pussy's way out of things and hurts others more than it would've hurt her..and theres no going back...
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On Sunday, December 5, 2004, Im_going_to_cry_now
(24) wrote:
thank you
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On Saturday, December 4, 2004, Im_going_to_cry_now
(24) wrote:
I appreciate the gesture, but I am not suicidal, and I am also a male, and I realize that this is cliche, but I like it, also, thanls for complimenting my writing style
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On Saturday, December 4, 2004, VenomPlease
(134) wrote:
Fuck cliche. You write about whatever you want to write about as long as it keeps you from doing whatever it is you say you want to do. Everyone feels this way, just let it out. As long as it's real thats all that matters.
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On Saturday, December 4, 2004, Twilight
(1786) wrote:
just trying to help her grow as a writer. she wont grow if she is convinced that this is as good as it gets. no one told her not to write it...:D
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On Saturday, December 4, 2004, Twilight
(1786) wrote:
him*
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A former member wrote:
writting about suicide is so cliché that the poem has to be really good to be fully appreciated by artist or intellects. other than that you're writting style is pretty good.