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My bowl of ashes
By ashottothetemple
You let me into your home
Allowed me to sleep quietly
On your cold hard floor
It mirrors your image
Sleek, but empty you live
While everynight I sleep
Out on your floor mat
Shaking firecly and awaiting you
Brilliant scratches cover my face
From your cats pushing me away
But still I wait for you
I'd wait until I have taken my last breath
Just to be held for one more night
It's all I'll ever ask from you
I still remember your freezing touch on a hot afternoon
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Copyright 2004 spirett
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On Saturday, December 24, 2011, Ladyhawke
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wrote:
I like the last stanza the best. It reallly pulls the peice together. It's an amazing piece regardless. You can really feel the sorrow and the pain, but also the toxic love in this. Excellent. Brava!!
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On Friday, October 24, 2008, estherbell
(52) wrote:
*goosebumps*
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On Friday, October 24, 2008, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
Stunning and bizarrely beautifully :)
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
dammit - i like the same line. >:) Must be great! I also like the paradox of the closing, and the image it portrays. Fine write. :)
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On Tuesday, October 5, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
i loved the line wonderland highlighted.. wonderful work.
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A former member wrote:
"Brilliant scratches cover my face from your cats pushing me away"...I love that line...inventive write, lovely.
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