The Wedding Photo
By Simply Me
The baby's screamin' down the hall,
as bottles break, against the wall.
She's finally said, to hell with it all,
his angry hands won't make her fall.
He tries to tell her, she should stay,
and somehow he'll find, a better way,
to show his love, but not today,
he's angry now, and there's hell to pay.
She screamed her hate, into his ears,
and with all she had, she fought the tears.
With breaks and bruises over the years,
she found the strength, to face her fears.
She grabbed her baby, from her bed,
he tried to stop her, as she fled.
"If you touch me again, you'll soon be dead."
But he didn't listen, to what she said.
He blacked her eye, and split her lip.
With one last blow, she lost her grip.
She felt the baby, starting to slip,
and she staggered forward, afraid she'd trip.
Then on the table, she noticed the frame,
but the man she'd married, just wasn't the same.
She regretted the day, she'd taken his name,
but she knew through it all, she wasn't to blame.
She grabbed the photo, as he grabbed her hair,
had to do it then, without a moment to spare.
The glass cut his throat, but she didn't care,
after all he's the reason, she had the affair.
Comments on "The Wedding Photo"
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A former member wrote:
wow i like!. I loved your ending. I know all about them changing and I'm glad in this she got out alive, i know a few who havent
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A former member wrote:
wow, very good. liked the twist at the end
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On Wednesday, November 23, 2005, yslehc
(334) wrote:
hmm twist at the end, wasnt expecting that.. nice job:D, i think i may have to add you to my favs :P
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
This is like the 40th time I've read this and I've added it to my faves. This absolutely beautiful. What a bastard, btw.
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A former member wrote:
wow brovo brovo
that was amazing
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, Alacer_Cogitatus
(140) wrote:
very well done. im sure some people can relate. A_C
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A former member wrote:
this is sick. if i could i'd add it to my favs. i love it.
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, liquid_emotion
(323) wrote:
Nice last line.
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, yslehc
(334) wrote:
ah.. sad write. beautifully done
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A former member wrote:
i would have to agree with apathy she did have the affair .. but other then that really really good write .. i liked it .. :) ~*blackroses*~
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Zara Synn
(57) wrote:
I agree, this is an extremely powerful write. Even those who haven't experienced this kind of pain can clearly see what it's about. Most excellent peice!
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A former member wrote:
Whoa.. I think this is a very powerful write. Lot of thought and pain. Personally, I like the rhyming, I think it adds to the piece. ~Wish Upon A Star
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A former member wrote:
This story/poem was well written I liked the ending though I'd have to say it is her fault
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Simply Me
(40) wrote:
Well it's not really supposed to seem like it's her fault for getting beat throughout her marriage but that it's his fault she turned to another man.
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A former member wrote:
hey not to bash your style or anything but you ryme well. ever think of useing more complex ryme schemes
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Simply Me
(40) wrote:
Yes I have tried all kinds of different rhyme schemes, this is actually the fist time I've written one where the end of every line rhymes.