The Outsider
By Soulseeker
I am hanging on your words.
I am soaking them in.
You call out flaws.
You point fingers,
still, I am soaking it in.
You live to drench my life in a cloak of anger,
but I see through your intentions.
I will not fall.
You will never recieve that gratification.
There will be no tears here.
I do not care that I am different.
I do not care that I stay home on Fridays to read.
I do not care that I make my bed every morning.
I just do not give a fuck about "fitting in."
I have better things to consume my time.
I choose to be this way and I alone can choose to change.
You are simply confused.
I am simply enlightened.
I will shed my wisdom,
maybe then you can escape.
I would rather be the outsider
who is looking in,
than the insider
who can't get out.
What consumes your brain besides
Who's doing what,
or the "crazy party" on Friday I will predicatably miss,
or the new drug of choice
that will kill the rest of your brain cells?
You will never be in the outsider's vicinity,
you will never experience beauty.
Why the hell do you waste your time?
I am the enlightened outsider
You are the conformed insider.
Who holds power here?
Comments on "The Outsider"
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A former member wrote:
i love your work in this my honest favorite line is id rather be the outsider looking in than the insider that cant get out.....awesome job i love this
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On Sunday, July 12, 2009, timekop
(15) wrote:
Why can't I give this poem a rating? This poem is like an unspoken dialog between two people with opposite personalites that attend high school together. It's sublime and captures a collective unconscios.
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On Wednesday, December 26, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
breathtakingly beautiful write you are a amazing writer thank you so much for sharing:)
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A former member wrote:
I like that
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On Thursday, October 21, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
I was once an outsider, but now find myself as becoming one with everyone... the ultimate form of insider... wondering where you went... seeking those with soul I suppose... 1, Seth
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On Friday, August 20, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
powerful and beautiful... i like the space of which you occupy as "enlightened outsider"... i can relate to this piece... 1LOVE, Seth
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On Tuesday, August 17, 2004, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
I would rather be the outsider who is looking in, than the insider who can't get out. is my favorite verse.. thanx for sharring *669*
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A former member wrote:
Who holds power here? YOU DO. The universe begins with (and ends with) you. Your mind, & heart & soul is all you've got. Use 'em well, or lose 'em all.
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, DarkWolf
(415) wrote:
I can get inside (or rather outside) this one. Very well done. I really understand this thought and feeling. Thank you for sharing it. -Michael
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, mysticventures
(527) wrote:
well worded - well put - well written
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, Northstar
(374) wrote:
I remember a time when I could really relate to this piece--nicely done
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, purr_verse
(1053) wrote:
"I do not care that I stay home on Fridays to read." - i smiled a lot at this line. enjoyed this write very much; the opening is also very strong and immediately pulled me in. :) damn fine.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
congratulations ! ... you've just undergone a creativity audit by the bureau of self importance ... anyway ,,,, dig the defiance throughout this very cool piece of work ... funguy
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
She requested my comments, goblinfucker. But wait, you're right - why would anyone want to help someone else write better, except to make themselves feel important? God, I'm so fucking selfish. I sure wish someone like you would teach me otherwise.
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
ok chuckles ...i'll learn you something .. limp wristed sarcasm , and strategic sincerity will get you beaten up in the subway , and laughed at afterwards ... i wouldve expected you to know that already ...lol ... goblinfucker
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
A lot of things will get you beaten up in the subway that shouldn't. I don't see what the fuck that has to do with commenting on someone's poem. Care to explain? Or are you just dodging the fact that I made you look like the total assfuck you are?
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
care to explain? ... sure ... i am saying that the nine guys who kicked your ass in that subway situation ( as you described in ... rage , the fire inside ) were probabably poets who saw through you , and beat you down for crimes against sincerity ...
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On Monday, August 16, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
You wanna help me out? Go fuck a blender.
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On Monday, August 16, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
I would call you a retard, but I would be offending retards. Gee, you're right, telling my friend she has a sexy body and blowing kisses to my girlfriend is truly poetic. If you were here, I would kick you in the ribs just for being such a stupid cock.
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On Saturday, August 14, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
and somehow , despite their efforts , you still haven't learned anything .... i'm trying to help you man .... assfuck
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Okay, time for lots of comments, so I'll refer to lines by number :) 1-5: nice rhythm, it sounds almost musical. 6-7: I would replace "drench" with a verb to match a cloak better, but you did a good job of re-wording the lines to make them work together.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
8-10: Rock on with not giving the bastards the gratification of tears. Tears are interesting... there's such conflicted symbolism in them. Anyway... 11-13: Fridays, not Fridays. Also, I think you do care - you just don't think it's bad! And I love that.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
14-16: I like how "choose to change" sounds - it has a nice ring to it. For these three lines, I think you could find more unique ways to say them. It's talented of you to describe ways that many people feel and don't always verbalize -
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
but if you can combine that with a unique way of phrasing it, you'll make the rest of DP jealous from all the books you'll be selling. 17-18: Simpleless rocks my socks. 19-20: Confused me a bit. 21-25: Fucking awesome. Incredible work on these lines.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
26-30: My guess is not much, unfortunately. Some people grow up; others don't... hopefully, more of these poor fools will grow up than not. 31-32: I know exactly how you feel... but be careful with your words here:
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
So... now that I wrote you a page of comments... all I have left to say is, good work!
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Overall - good work, and huge improvement from the last I read (not that that wasn't a good poem as well). Your ideas are just as great as they've always been, but your structure and your processing of your thoughts are both improving visibly.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
36: This line is interesting. Where does power come from? Are you truly concerned with holding the power, are you proud of it, are you worried that maybe you don't, in fact, hold the power? Or that you're missing out on something?
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Do you want to say that these people have no hope of reform and that they will *never* experience beauty, or do you want to say that *as long as they remain that way* they never will? 34-35: I agree with the first two lines.