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the taste. i know
By Exodus
Return my disfigured heart.
A pitiful excuse.
My denial.
Hand it back over to me.
The ball is in
My court.
It is your turn
To feel it tear right out of you.
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Copyright 2004 Exodus
Published on Wednesday, July 7, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "the taste. i know"
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A former member wrote:
I like this one... very heartfelt.. leaves you wondering...
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, sixsixnine
(476)
wrote:
really love this piece! it sinks into a place inside,seems like it's an emotional ride with such few words. *669*
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Hah, that's awesome. Short, driven, and cutting. "The ball is in/ My court/ it is your turn/ To feel it tear right out of you" is great... it sounds like you're talking about ripping out hearts, which is a favorite pasttime of mine.
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A former member wrote:
That's what I got out of it, as well...ripping out hearts...the structure was punchy, sort of like each strained pull, it seemed to me. Nice write.
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
simple and meaningfull... Kinda unlike you.. hmm.. the stile that is.. I like it tho.. Monkey .. btw nice use of space
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Simple and meaningful, unlike you?! You monkey fece! Hehe... just kidding... I read the sentence after ;)
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