All You Have Done
By Mischevious Princess
Stealing my heart was easy for you...
True love was the fantasy only you
could make true...
Love was transparent, like charcoal steam...
You were the one cut out of my dream...
You were the one who took me from sleep...
And stole my heart with a love so deep...
You opened the door to a love so dense,
You cared not the cost or expense...
You grasped me from darkness not a moment
Too soon,
And displayed a love so pure and
Perfectly in tune...
The light in your soul was impossible to avoid;
Hate you banished,
Fear you destroyed...
The day I met you,
The loss of love was quenched...
My soul once so dry,
Was instantly drenched...
Please, you must never forget...
All that was destined for us
That day that we met...
To someone who'll never love me back...
Comments on "All You Have Done"
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A former member wrote:
This is an extremly heartfilled poem and can see the intensity, very nice write
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On Wednesday, June 23, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
Wow.. beautiful write... so many understand it. I love the flow of this. Great job. ~Kirsten~
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On Monday, June 21, 2004, illspokenwords
(8) wrote:
god..wow. that really hit me hard. i suppose that's because i know how it feels..and i know how it hurts. really and truly amazing.
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A former member wrote:
this hits you in the shest turns your heart and reminds you of everything in a relationship. This is killer.
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On Sunday, June 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
Wow this is beautiful...I totally understand this since I'm feeling exactly the same rite now kya
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On Sunday, June 20, 2004, glasshouse
(530) wrote:
Wow. Powerful indeed. Beautiful and captivating. I loved it all the way thrugh but the first stanza was... astounding. Great write. -Glass
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A former member wrote:
Powerful write and such well chosen words and flow. I liked it very much. As for the last line, it will happen but not necessarily from them!!
Cheers!!
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On Wednesday, June 16, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
this was beautiful and heartfelt, flowed seamlessly, i liked the transparant line best