from your ice petal.

By FindAgentX

i've fallen too deep (to pull myself out) now

i've written too hard (to erase this) now

your eyes look into me (deep, two pools of sight) i sink in (undimmed by pain behind)





every word gives me feelings (reserved only for very touching moments)

i let go on the inside (and hold it in on the outside)

i wish you could save me from me.



every action is(n't) considered (with masochistic intention)

every move that i make (will break me within)



the only words in my song aren't meant for me

and it chips my heart every time (because i know it can't be)



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(i know i used someone's line there, but i can't remember who. if that someone sees it, let me know and i'll either give you credit or edit it out)

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Copyright 2004 FindAgentX
Published on Monday, April 12, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • FindAgentX On Tuesday, August 31, 2010, FindAgentX (31)By person wrote:

    someone wrote this into a song, i wish i could find him. :/

  • AniDayz On Monday, January 31, 2005, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    very uniquely done and captivating. i loved this very much.

  • A former member wrote: Loverly, like lots of chocolate for me to eat..

  • capt_funguy On Friday, April 30, 2004, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    you have a new fan ... sulky will catch a little flack for not steering me your way ... beautiful work ... glad i caught it ...funguy

  • sulkylime On Monday, April 26, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    i like this as well - very cool.. i don't see anything contrived though "save me from me" reminded me of evanescence's lyrics -save me from the nothing i've become- an overused expression nowadays

  • sulkylime On Sunday, May 2, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    i also remembered where i heard something like this .. rescue me from me ! in smashing pumpkin's song galapogos.. sorry i just had to say it. it doesn't matter though the poem's lovely

  • A former member wrote: nicely done. *claps violently*

  • sulkylime On Monday, April 26, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    clap violently? rotf

  • steuss On Monday, April 12, 2004, steuss (92)By person wrote:

    I really enjoy your style, the use fo the ( ) 's are wonderful, like the poem is the text outside, and that what you really mean is the combination, that people usually only see the words outside the parenthises. WELL done!

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