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Dreaming What is Left of Dreams
By Midnight Phoenix
(I tried to take a different approach on this one. It's definately not
my best work, but let me know if something could be done better. I wanted
to make it a little more raw and sketchy to display the limbo of emotion
occuring.)
I’ve given up conscience
I’ve given up strength
No more will the words keep hurting and aching
You took my eyes from the stars
You took my mind from its state
Just to pass into the burning flames, yeah
I really wish I didn’t feel this way
But it is a lonely life as a saint
A choking hope just doesn’t feel so great
How can I hold onto my life that way
I’ve given up dreaming
I’ve given into you
A drone just like all the other wasted victims
You took the love from my heart
You took the light from my eyes
A new shallow existence created
I really wish I didn’t feel this way
But it is a lonely life as a saint
A choking hope just doesn’t feel so great
How can I hold onto my life that way, yeah
So tonight I’ll shed my skin
Break my wings
And begin to dream
What is left of dreams
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Copyright 2003 little nemo
Published on Tuesday, December 9, 2003.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Dreaming What is Left of Dreams"
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A former member wrote:
Great ending.
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On Wednesday, December 10, 2003, WinterGrave
(258)
wrote:
vary nice, i really dont think you need to change anything, its great as is.~~~Grave
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On Wednesday, December 10, 2003, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
Brandon you sure do know how to evoke feelings, words and thought into one....to dream what is left of dreams....sounds like a blissful plan.
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A former member wrote:
I think this had a very lyrical feel to it, maybe something that would scare the shit out of the people in 1940's jazz club when the song suddenly punked out half-way through. Maybe just my current state of mind, well done. ~Ryan
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A former member wrote:
Well...for what it's worth, I thought it was beautiful. Very calming in a way...ok so maybe I'm just weird...
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On Friday, December 12, 2003, Delilah
(113) wrote:
Agreed...well said...~Delilah~
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
its quite a bold statement to claim yourself as a saint though it drives the point home more clearly. I like it... I like that you are trying something different. You are talented enough to succeed in multi-dimensions. :::OLd
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
I'm no saint... but part of poetry is exaggeration, isn't it? :)
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
no you are not a saint.. though I am. And I would never in a bazillion years exaggerate in my poetry.
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
Well.. Actually I was being modest.. I'm far more like a God. An awesome God at that. And God knows where you steal your poetry from... tsk tsk..
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
I didn't know God was so jealous in nature. My poetry is but of your creations.
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
yeah, I'm still a saint :P
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
but I had you going there!
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
Ok, I lied.... damn.. you win... which means.... I'm human.... *runs and cries in the corner*
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, diavolessa
(208) wrote:
Last stanza pulled it together. I liked it, I could tell it was a little forced yet it seemed sincere and heartfelt! :)
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