smoke rings in the dark
By kissofdeath
i watch you from the corner
Your fate will soon be set.
I smoke for my satisfaction
and watched as you wept.
Your tears stained the pillow
you were confused on what to do.
But I left you some instructions
simple ones, no clue.
A black shiny friend to comfort you through the pain
a couple companions to lock it and gauge.
I have left you with the thought that I am gone from earth
your going to take your life, without me you are hurt.
Im going to enjoy it, sitting here alive.
you think your going to join me a few seconds is all it will take but
little do you know Im watching you meet you fate. The look in your eyes
has made you realize that there is no other choice and you know you have
to die
there you go beautiful I'll see you very soon. You press on the safe and
push with a boom. I watch with excitment and now there is doom. I get up
and stand and look into you.
Your still alive. The look in your eyes tells me you see what you have
done and what you really need.
No im not an angel, I could never be, but tonight is your night, and now
you see. I wanted you dead my wish has come true, enjoy your sweet death,
You had it coming to you.
*kiss
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Comments on "smoke rings in the dark"
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A former member wrote:
Very chilling, good poem. I could see the pictures that you created as I read it. I think they could make a movie about this ha ha it would make a good thriller.
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A former member wrote:
The title is a bit misleading but it was a really good piece.
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...very dark...very evil...what a way to kill someone...let them do it...jeez, you women always seem to have us by the--*cough*...um, well, nicely done... -Darun
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, WinterGrave
(258) wrote:
My head hurt now **rubs skull*, i had to read it 5 times to figure out who shot who...or am i still confuzed. either way, it was fun to read, good job.~~~grave
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
very vengeful...i hope i never piss you off
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A former member wrote:
what a joker you are. i think twist of fate would be a better title. nice. U.P.