Relationship Flat-Line

By Damon Tarloth

Sapping, Draining, My patience waning,
Testing, Taxing, Anger I'm masking,
Swearing, Frustration, Intentional agitation,
You have me at my boiling point...

Taunting, Tempting, Never relenting,
Your vinegar charm, Rudely hinting,
Risking, Ranting, Beyond retraction,
Danger approaching, My violent reaction...

Enticing fate, Provoking my Hate,
Tolerance unnerving, Desperately deserving,
Your voice so grating, My sanity abating,
No longer caring and losing control...

Tongue of razors, Your worthless favors,
Careless, Critical, Bitter, Cynical,
Acidic, Pathetic, Mentally regret it,
My vicious reaction, To this fatal attraction...

We both crack, No turning back,
Blood splatters, Nothing else matters,
You, Me, Will cease to Be,
In darkness we sleep, For eternity...

Damon Tarloth

I wrote this in a 10 minute exercise, all except the last stanza as I added that to give it finality...

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Published on Friday, October 24, 2014. Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

My Best 3 Poems are PURELY TAINTED / THERE IS NOTHING MORE THAN THERE WAS BEFORE / SEDUCTIVE PAIN

Comments on "Relationship Flat-Line"

A former member wrote: This is good and brought some big names out of the shadows. Your poetry much deserves an award.
On Monday, February 23, 2015, Damon Tarloth (142) wrote:

Thank you very much for the comments, they are much appreciated :) I have many more that are not posted on here, and now I can, thank you very much :)
A former member wrote: Wow.. This is magneficently written.. I can feel all the emotions you have imprinted in your words.. Raw, sincere, from the bottom of your core.. Sometimes such hate/love relationships are the ones who helps us to grow and to know ourselves in a better way.. Well, that is what I have experienced before.. Thank you for sharing! :)
On Thursday, November 13, 2014, soul_versing (774) wrote:

You had me at: "you have me at my boiling point..." clever constructive wordplay. From my standpoint, you intrigue my curiosity to read more from you. -bows
On Friday, November 14, 2014, Damon Tarloth (142) wrote:

Your comment answers my question that I left in a comment on a different one that you read of mind... lol ... I get a smile every time I hear "wordplay" or something similar used in a comment. Thank you again Tattoo Goddess...
On Sunday, November 2, 2014, dwells (4177) wrote:

Intrigued by the many internal rhymes going on inside this piece DT; almost a rap of sorts. Nevertheless, a very entertaining and insightful read, writ with a volcanic bitterness before the eruption. Well done! (they don't always follow the Hollywood script)
On Sunday, November 2, 2014, Damon Tarloth (142) wrote:

Your comments are very much appreciated. It's what came to me. I was forcing Iambic Tetrameter/Penta but that was killing my creativity and giving me a mental block. So now I will write what flows out, and some will have structure and some will not. 90% of them will not even be saved or pushed into a finished product anyway. Comments def. help :)
On Monday, October 27, 2014, blue angel (866) wrote:

Great display of erupting emotions. I really like the alliteration too. Seductive pain? You drive this one deep!
On Tuesday, October 28, 2014, Damon Tarloth (142) wrote:

Thank you very much Blue Angel for leaving a comment :) I repetitively date and hang out with crazy girls, and yes it does give me constant material to write about. lol... Some of the pieces could fit perfectly and speak about multiple people as many of the situations happen over and over again with the same outcome. That's not a bad thing, it's what I like... ;) D.T.
On Saturday, October 25, 2014, SickSanityJenn (250) wrote:

I definitely felt this one. Well done for 10 minutes. Fast paced, good flow and excellent word choice. Great ink
On Saturday, October 25, 2014, Damon Tarloth (142) wrote:

You saw that I posted something very quickly. Thanks for checking it out and the much appreciated feedback :) I will now return the favor...