Seductive Pain
By Damon Tarloth
Writing this down I go from anger to rage,
reliving each moment as words hit the page.
My fury lashes out from memories long dead,
the crimson runs down and the hatred spreads...
Her alluring smile exudes total control,
shrouded in darkness with a hypnotic pull.
Make no mistake she is a 100 percent pure,
an evil sickness and there is no cure...
I welcomed the hurt, the sorrow, and pain,
her irrational mood swings driving me insane.
The intense passion coupled with a bitter bite,
every fight forgiven by the end of the night...
Anything to please her regardless of the price,
it's never good enough to warm a heart of ice.
Once you are touched by her seductive death,
your fate is set until your final breath...
Even if you happen to break away,
you have been marked until your very last day.
This tainted love is all that you will ever crave,
darkness is the master and you are the slave...
D.T.
Written for a (Rant Contest)
Past and Future Twisted Relationships...
Author's Note:
My Best 3 Poems are PURELY TAINTED / THERE IS NOTHING MORE THAN THERE WAS BEFORE / SEDUCTIVE PAINComments on "Seductive Pain"
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2015, Insatiable
(43) wrote:
An amazing piece, I'm left without intelligent words. Thanks for posting! Xx
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On Thursday, February 5, 2015, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you very much for commenting. :)
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A former member wrote:
Wicked poem Damon! I've been in relationships where the other is so perfect that it is tormenting. This can open up your own flaws and amplify them, which has happened to me many times. This writing hits me hard like a bag of bricks, so real, so vicious, like an internal bleeding. I really dig this, it's close to home.
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On Thursday, December 4, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thanks for reading and your comments are very much appreciated... :)
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On Saturday, November 29, 2014, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Hurt so good and maybe someday I'll sally forth and dabble in something beyond "the missionary". Kidding DT - this was great and the reader can feel the enticement, well done!
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On Monday, December 1, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you very much... :)
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A former member wrote:
just joined and looking at some poems on here so after this is my favorite. truly love how deep your words reach.
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On Tuesday, November 25, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
I am actually surprised you found my words at all, as a few got very upset when I called them out for abusing their power... I figured most of my words would be blocked. lol... ;) Thank you very much for reading and even more for commenting and noticing that I pour myself into my words... TY :)
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On Tuesday, November 25, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
I just tried to read something that you wrote to return the favor, but you have nothing posted atm.... :(
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On Thursday, November 13, 2014, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
Holy shit. ...I'm left flabbergasted. Phenomenal, period.
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On Thursday, November 13, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Your response is perfect, exactly what I wanted to see... Thank you :)
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A former member wrote:
Wow twisted - you write emotional stuff and it is highly compelling! I like the character you create, inspiring such an unhealthy fascination!
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On Thursday, November 13, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you :)
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A former member wrote:
I just joined and yours was one of the first poems I read. I really liked it, the flow and feel. Congrats on taking 3rd place!
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On Monday, June 30, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you very much :) Welcome to the site...
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On Wednesday, June 25, 2014, blue angel
(866) wrote:
this is wildly alluring. my favorite kind. its been a while since I read you, I'm so glad I seen this one.. good luck w/ the contest, this is top notch :)~
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On Thursday, June 26, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you for your kind words. The results were announced and I got 3rd place :( FLOW/METER- Flawless. IMAGERY- Strong. RHYME-Perfect except 1 error. The words "Control and Pull" are a close rhyme, but not a rhyme. "Her alluring smile exudes total control, shrouded in darkness with a hypnotic pull." When I say the words "Pole, Pull, and Poll" I pronounce them all the same, but I am wrong. So Control rhymes with pole,poll, and roll, but not with bull. As bull rhymes with pull, full, but not with pole, soul, or toll. That error cost me 1st place :(
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A former member wrote:
What a seductive and well penned poem.. With a touch of alluring darkness. I truly enjoyed reading it.. :)
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On Wednesday, June 25, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Everyone that takes the time to read and comment on something that I have written, will get the same back from me. As I will read some of their work also...
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On Wednesday, June 25, 2014, Damon Tarloth
(142) wrote:
Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate getting feedback from everyone, as that is the only way I know if I am getting better at writing or not. :)