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Waiting Tables
By Salty Ships
I swallowed cold medicine
that I pocketed from the dilapidated gas station behind my bus stop
so people wouldn't think of Typhoid Mary
I collected even the coins
left as afterthoughts beneath dirty dishes
because my cellphone was shut off
again
and I will never love you like your other women
cleanly
from behind the gloss of expensive degrees
with wholesome intentions, name brand handbags
and your white collared shirts will always baffle my nerves
will always tickle my thighs
obscenely
but if you shed your corporate lab coat
the wrinkles steamed from your life while you showered
and I bite my tongue before I curse
hide my fancy stolen ink pens in an apron
no one need ever know.
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Copyright 2013 Salty Ships
Published on Monday, October 28, 2013.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Friday, March 28, 2014, FadedBlues
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wrote:
...beautiful poetry. no pretenses, just uncomplicated love...
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A former member wrote:
Ok I'm actually going to leave a decent comment on this because it deserves better than a fuckaroo smiley face pretty poem pat on the back. For starters I like the voice; it's solid throughout and honest which gives it an air of confidence sometimes a raw poetry approach can lack. The language tells me it shines intelligence but knows the streets enough to express the genuine feel of the piece; I'm slightly uncomfortable with our different backgrounds but I understand I can make this work if I swallow my insecurities and present myself in a way I could be if my circumstances were different. That might not be exactly what you were intentionally trying to get across, but it's was I perceived from it. The line that stood out the most for me was, "I will never love you like your other women
cleanly". I don't have much to say about it other than brilliant line, we've all thought it but you said it. All in all I like the piece in it's entirety, it feels real and so relatable. I have to say the opening line drew me in but the style held me and it spoke to me. Very nice job, I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
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On Monday, October 28, 2013, megaprime81
(740) wrote:
I liked this because of how beautifully everything was expressed; a great poem, that stands out. 10.
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