Mirror, Mirror, If You Please....
By Peyton1
Inspired by SuiGeneris's Work "The Face" and the comments thereof...
Mirror, Mirror, If You Please....
So, what exactly does it see? This mirror that stares into ME?
If not the puny reflection of me
(the thing I prune for others to see),
Then perhaps the essence of me
(the thing struggling deep within me).
Surely by now you know me better than me....I invoke thee,
Mirror, mirror, show us what you see,
Mirror, mirror, show us the real me,
Mirror, mirror, show us this I beg thee.
The surface fogs over, and writing slowly appears,
I can just make it out between the smears,
Backward and wrong side out, letter by letter, it's revealed....
"Careful of that for which you wish, I'm the manifester of all your fears,
I'm permitted to grant you this, Sights to haunt the rest of your years!"
I see a flash of Dark, takes the light from my eyes,
The room I'm standing in, is no longer the same size.
Why is it suddenly so cold?
Looking through this window, is like peering through ice.
Why am I suddenly so old?
Life's a piece of cake, why can't I have another slice?
Now as I look at the writing, on the glass,
It appears normal and very neat, first class.
The window I saw, is not a window after all,
My back...goes forward...against the rear wall!
My time in front of the mirror, is now ceased,
I'm trapped inside the mirror, but not deceased.
No longer can I vainly primp for outward perfection,
I've now become a figment of my own reflection!!
To be continued......in the reflection of misdirection...
Author's Note:
It would've been wrong to not classify it as ReflectiveComments on "Mirror, Mirror, If You Please...."
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A former member wrote:
i love this\
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On Saturday, January 11, 2014, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Hello mr./miss words_to_life, thanks for the comment and glad you enjoyed it. Sorry I missed this comment till now, but I'm in a depressed state currently. Welcome to our dark valley! Comment often and post a poem soon so we can read. Thanks again, see ya.....
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On Thursday, January 9, 2014, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
This is wonderful, sometimes the way we see ourselves is a lot worse than we actually are.. Great write :)
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On Thursday, January 9, 2014, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you for reading me miss Caitlin. And correct you are, we are often our own worse critic. Thakns again, see ya.....
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On Tuesday, October 29, 2013, poe_lover28
(163) wrote:
i very much enjoyed this piece and not only because i love mirror pieces. i dont believe we have met, i havent been on much lately but ill have to see to reading more of your work, cheers fellow dark poet i hope to see more
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On Tuesday, October 29, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you kindly for the nice comment. We have not met, as of yet, but do not fret, or wrinkles you'll get, the mirror they might upset.............. woops, that's not until part 2, not quite ready yet.....stay tuned! And Happy Howl-o-weeeeeeeeen! Thanks for reading me, I shall check your page as well...
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A former member wrote:
wow.... just got some pretty bad goose bumps reading this.... this is great!!! I like how you use 'thee' it's different, in a good way!!! keep writing!!!
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On Saturday, October 26, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you for your comment miss Wolfie, I do love goosebumps! Maybe I can create more of the little devils with part 2.................Thanks for reading me...
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A former member wrote:
I'm glad I was able to inspire you to make this in a way. I absolutely love this because for one, I have self esteem issues which means mirrors aren't my friends as it is. This is a great poem and quite easy to read even at the length it is. Cant wait for part two.
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On Wednesday, October 23, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you so much for the kind comment on this, and for the inspiration. Part two may likely take a turn towards a little freaky. I'm working on it now, Thanks again...
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On Monday, October 21, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
"A figment of my own reflection", wonderful line, and yet we are slaves to appearances in a judgmental world. Recommend a ball of twine before to wander inside too deeply, cheers Peyton!
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On Monday, October 21, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thanks a ton Dwells! I am venturing further in, but I forgot to bring the ball of twine LOL!! "Figment of my own reflection" just hit me as a nice closing, while I was standing in front of the mirror (talking to myself, shh, don't tell) looking for inspiration. I appreciate you commenting, thanx again...
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A former member wrote:
The line 'Backward and wrong side out, letter by letter, it reveals.' really stands out and breaks the flow by being different to previous lines and without a complement. I like the story and the way the poem as a whole flows. I don't feel so comfortable being in a room with so many mirrors now.
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On Sunday, October 20, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you for commenting. I've been kinda weird around mirrors for awhile.....ever since that last acid trip...... The plot is that mirrors can be unfriendly in more ways than you'd think, and the story's not over yet...... Thanks for reading.
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On Saturday, October 19, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
Wow this is really good, reflective of your writing talent... the flow and rhyme are spot on ;)~ Certain antique mirrors can creep me out.... well done, Peyton *
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On Sunday, October 20, 2013, Peyton1
(205) wrote:
Thank you miss Kendra for the comment, you're too kind! There's more to it, if antique mirrors creep you out now, wait till part 2.....mwahaha! Thanks again....
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On Sunday, October 20, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
Can't wait.... *shuddering quietly* ;)