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Tantrums.
By the Id
As dust storms and rain clouds Howling. Clashing. Proud.
Defiant winds wail with choreographed kicking and screaming
Lightning shocks iris sizzling cheek bones and dental thunder cracks.
Pressurized blood pumping. lava lamps bubbling to surface in my red chest.
Hate whines flow with oceanic power to flood your brain with my vindictive
sickness.
You could have prevented this.
You could have prevented this.
“You could have prevented this.” I hiss, in viciously disguised whispers
before tasting
your corpse.
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Copyright 2013 the Id
Published on Monday, July 29, 2013.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
I'm unapologeticAwards
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On Thursday, August 29, 2013, Gothchic
(37)
wrote:
WOW! The delicate selection of dense words just draws me more and more into it. I love this
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On Wednesday, July 31, 2013, blue angel
(877) wrote:
"Lightning shocks iris sizzling cheek bones and dental thunder cracks" ouch!! Killer write ;)~
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A former member wrote:
Haha! Pow! No need for apologies my good man. I like how there's a lot of dangerous elements of thunder & lightning to express the rage, yet the work is sprinkled with words that bring to mind just how childish our angers can be, like 'hate whines...', & the title itself, of course. It usually comes down to wounded pride, doesn't it? Haha, a "don't make me hurt you, & it will be your fault if I do" kind of logic to the passions of rage. Good first post, id. Welcome aboard.
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, the Id
(31) wrote:
Nailed it man. thank you
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A former member wrote:
NECROPHAGIA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(334) wrote:
You sure know how to leave your mark. this was intense... and the ending really packed a punch. awesome stuff. xoxo
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A former member wrote:
way to make an entrance. welcome! you really fucking set the scene. entrancing. thank you.
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, dwells
(4299) wrote:
Corpus deliciosus, get it while it's still warm maybe. Great rant and wonderful use of Mother Nature's metaphors in the opening. We are all children of hers, and she can be a mean mother, cheers and welcome to DP!
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis
(94) wrote:
Damn, "..before tasting your corpse.." Awesome ending, unapologetic indeed. Great first post, it made me hungry... Welcome to DP, hope you find everything well; if ya need help with anything, just drop me a line. Again, great post, look forward to seeing more of your sickness! -NN
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