The End
By Dreamzz
The darkness eats the sickened land
The cold wind sweeps away the
beaches sand
The old tree breaks away limb by limb
The storm
sweeps away beloved kin.
I scream to the heavens "Protect me
now!"
As one goes out to face the storm.
Her britches ripping,
being torn.
Sweat smolders her face, but on she goes.
I
kill you with the hands i despise
The fires eats you up, yes the fires
rise.
The darkness fills my very soul.
Will it fill the empty
hole.
The small girl wails out to the skies
as her mother
dies of the death
died faster than all the rest.
And as the fire
eats her too her brown hair waves goodbye to you.
The heroine
runs into the flames
some one else she hopes to save
the blood
drips off her bronze tanned skin
her eyes glow silver like a metal
tin.
The end shines bright like a golden flame
one only
few can contain.
And as the end comes near
we all hide in fear.
The frost wind chills the frozen soul
maybe it will fill
her empty hole.
She killed you with the hand she now shall despise
oh as the fires rise.
And darkness eats the land.
The
end,
Alex Flemel.
Happy dying~
Comments on "The End"
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On Friday, April 2, 2010, Rowan
(202) wrote:
The visuals were stunning. I saw the scene of the fire in my mind as you painted it there. It seemed so tragic. It seemed like you were taking a journey through hell, trudging on to finally reach salvation. Was the salvation only found in death? If so..then was the journey of life considered one's hell? Hmm very intriguing. I feel as though there's something more to this..write on.
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On Friday, April 2, 2010, RubyXero
(484) wrote:
well that was pretty. nice flow
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On Friday, April 2, 2010, A Life Without You
(146) wrote:
interesting read, nice flow, love the subtle detail
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On Friday, April 2, 2010, punk mc cool
(75) wrote:
this was a really nice poem....the flow was perfect and is this a tribute to Alex Flemel...all i can say is ill give it a 10 :)
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On Friday, April 2, 2010, Dreamzz
(19) wrote:
Well no this is not a tribute to Alex Flemel in fact Alex Flemel is my pin name. I picked it instead of my real name because i write from both sides and on other sites I am also none as the writer with no gender. Lately I have been feeling as though maybe I should sign some of this for my readers just to mix it up a bit, but on another subject thank you so much.