Winter Aura
By ubiquitoussoul
Sharp shimmering streak of white,
gleams,
cascading down the bleak stroke of her ebony taut hair
,
trickling and breaking,
as bright sparks
in a symphony of dying fire,
the flare violently
whirling into its ashen knees,
shriveled from its
effloresce steeple,
It's luminous embers swimming,
through the arctic cloud quilted northern sky's of
December,
Nimbly flowing deep inside floe a still
drapery weaved ,
from a winter waterfall,
trapped
in its chest a silent, rapid, Polaris flash of,
frost
crystalline reflection,
lost against the jagged back
splash of eternities endless wall,
under the obsidian
cloak of a sleeping concave moon;
Manic as the
swift descending ripple and soft clapping
of an open
book left to flutter, crippled, hooked in the cold choke-hold of
the whispering dyslexic wind,
running its pass tickling
the pasture's numb fingers, crushing the timber's weeping
limbs,
waking the earth's unshaken forests,
shedding
frozen tear's from their naked boughs
only to continue
in linger awaiting this year's rebirth,
in their snow
kiss bow.
Author's Note:
this poets hair http://www.darkpoetry.com/node/user/130 is a fine example of what inspired this poem completelyComments on "Winter Aura"
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A former member wrote:
Excellent flow here. Of all, I should know how mundane an attempt to gain Winter's treasure can become. You've captured Her very well, in all Her selfish, cocky vengeance and graceful nature.
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On Thursday, November 24, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(273) wrote:
Frozen cold! i love the cold season, one of my favorite!
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On Friday, October 28, 2011, sTr8-jAcKeT
(697) wrote:
Very vivid, almost gracious of imagination. Nice work my friend.
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A former member wrote:
amazing imagery, a fascinating spin on winter, i wish i could see the images in ur mind as u write XD.
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A former member wrote:
Where I'm from winter is the coldest season,occurs around june until august.It's not my favourite season but this poem has changed that.I love the 2nd stanza..especially its last two lines.Awesome stuff man
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A former member wrote:
You paint a very vivid image with your words. Your poetry is like a beautiful and artistic movie.
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On Thursday, April 8, 2010, boneplate
(56) wrote:
"under the obsidian cloak of a sleeping concave moon". what a vision..thank you....
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Dei
(663) wrote:
my only logistic questions would by why you compared something "ebony" to "chalk" . . . since ebony means black.. was it a typo or did you mean black chalk? either way, It fascinating. Wherever this winter was that inspired you i envy its beauty and i liked this rhythm. It reminded me of a river. Free flowing with a few rapids.
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On Thursday, April 1, 2010, Rowan
(197) wrote:
Such elegant imagery. You've painted a picture with words. I personally adore the winter season. Everything..not dead, but merely in a slumber waiting to be reborn in the warm spring. Lovely as always, Soul
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A former member wrote:
this is so beautiful. its so discriptive. for me i can never find poems with enough detail, i personaly think you are amazing at capturing the imagination, almost as if taking over ones mind with what YOU see... inspiering
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On Thursday, September 17, 2009, CjPsychotic
(30) wrote:
This is an orgasmic image orgy! I was pretty skeptical at first, since most poets gloriously murder the Decemberistic images common for poetry, but your rendition was definitely something I haven't seen before. I do have one thing I can provide as some help though: Try not to submit so many poems in sucession...people will be less likely to view them. Space them apart to conserve credits, and get more feedback and acclaim. Thanks for writing.