The Flower of Beyond

By palenoble

Be you a rose;
I have yet to find out which I dread or adore most.

Your petals of cobweb, delicate and fragile,
a soft ethereal feather,
your mind that's so agile,
your leaves of nether?

Or is it the unintentional sharpness of your thorns?
Nonetheless, I DO love you far beyond my pathetic words

xx







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© 2008 palenoble
Published on Friday, August 29, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • snakeskingrin On Sunday, August 31, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    As all of us need the thorns to balance the beauty of a rose...such balance allows us to maintain our sanity...:) Nice work. Snake

  • The Lipstick Factor On Sunday, August 31, 2008, The Lipstick Factor (287)By person wrote:

    I too had thought there was no originality left in the comparison of love and roses, but you've trumped it, splendidly, I might add.

  • palenoble On Sunday, August 31, 2008, palenoble (46)By person wrote:

    This was written for someone who is in many ways special to me. Her name means 'flower' in her language. The only reason I picked the rose is that I needed the thorns :)

  • Kaleidoscope_Heart On Saturday, August 30, 2008, Kaleidoscope_Heart (111)By person wrote:

    This is an unusual style, but in a good way. That's interesting, because usually comparing a love to a rose is cliche but here it is not. The last two lines are lovely and very relatable, which contrast to the complex lines before them. The last line especially was great; it reflects how language will fail us everytime when w wish to convey our thoughts and feelings (especialy in english!) But ironically, we still try everytime :)

  • urbanhumility On Saturday, August 30, 2008, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    poetry incarnate! well done........urban

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