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(good job, hey, thanks)
By asphyxia
See my star upon the horizon?
It [would] be the one to go down.
//IthinkIrememberatimewhenIthoughtIwasinvincible.
Now. I know. Smarter (not better).
“I wanted you to feel it.”
Trust me, I felt it.
As panic set in, my heart fell out.
..
And I’d wish upon a star,
a lovely star shining bright.
Oh, if only I could see one…
see one in my hopeless night.
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© 2007 asphyxia; Jolene Korrin Long
Published on Thursday, July 5, 2007.
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"Poetry"
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On Monday, July 9, 2007, carlosjackal
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wrote:
This rings with that feeling of hopelessness, nothing inspires, nothing excites. Knowledge weighs you down instead of feeding creativity and free-thought. Very good write. -Carl
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On Saturday, July 7, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
this fits toghether nicely jolene, enjoyed every line.
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, asphyxia
(58) wrote:
i messed around with this for like two weeks before liking it. thats just how its been going lately for me!
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On Thursday, July 5, 2007, sIo
(926) wrote:
i like this...to me it seems like you've gone blind some how, metaphorically or literally at the end. a good brain tease, this one.
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, asphyxia
(58) wrote:
why thank you! i originally had another line or two in it, but a friend told me it/they wasn't/weren't needed.
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