Comments by Queazenart
- "Ending three lines with "see" in such close proximity drives me crazy. The whole middle section of this piece seems under cooked and don't do that much for the narrative/metaphor of the poem. Sorry to be a critic :/"
Posted by Queazenart on "Soul in Turmoil" by felicity0444
- "I like the way each stanza acts as it's own scene. You use repetition quite effectively here as well. Good job."
Posted by Queazenart on "Wind queen" by EllenVonV
- "What a nice, small, painful piece. It's simple, but not dumb, and it feels honest in a way that enhances the melancholy. Great use of imagery, as well. Good poem."
Posted by Queazenart on "suicide on white rose petals" by Asura
- "Yet again a wonderful poem. I keep rereading it and I uncover more and more in the narrative. You have so much to say and such a unique way of saying it. The sporadic rhyming, including the occasional internal rhyme, gives this piece a rhythm and lyrical flavor, making it surprisingly easy to read. The story told is also excellent. I believe it is about the speaker's struggle with deciding whether or not to pursue a woman that probably isn't good for them. I'm still finding pieces to the puzzle every time I read it, though. Again, excellent job my friend. 10/10"
Posted by Queazenart on "to the pleasure garden's grove" by out there
- "Perfect use of sensory language and imagery. This poem is about as close as one can get to describing complete nothingness and still make it interesting. It is bleak and desolate beyond comparison. Bravo!"
Posted by Queazenart on "Black isn’t the darkest color" by SolApathy
- "Such a simple, plain poem, but it's such a good read that I've come back to it a few times. It's nice to have something easy to digest like this. I love the sentiment of it, as well. Great job. PS the voicemail part reminds me of a lyric from a Saddest Landscape song, because I'm emo af XD"
Posted by Queazenart on "B201606673" by Malice In Wonderland
- "Bitter and scathing with an excellent flow. The rhythm of this piece really is great. Good job."
Posted by Queazenart on "...BANE" by SolApathy
- "Brilliant in its simplicity. This piece is clear, concise, poignant, and relatable. Great job. Thank you for sharing."
Posted by Queazenart on "Nightmare" by lshidonil
- "I like this. It's heartfelt, to say the least, and reminds me of highschool. Bittersweet, but mostly bitter. The transition from talking about stars in the dark to the eyes of someone else is beautiful, as is that entire fourth from the end stanza. That is a sentiment that strikes close to the heart for me. Great job. I look forward to more. "
Posted by Queazenart on "World of Dust" by lshidonil
- "What a dark way of describing love. It is not a wholly positive emotion, but rather a complex and dynamic part of life that can make life worth living or just utterly suck, to be a bit frank. You did a good job of conveying that. The last four lines specifically express the negativity of the situation. It comes a little out of left field and leaves the reader feeling unsettled. I like it! Great job."
Posted by Queazenart on "No one needs to know" by Angelic Darkness
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