Wind queen
By EllenVonV
While the wind plays with my ruffled gown
While I walk along the abandoned shore
While the moon slowly greets the dawn
I will be heading to the big iron door.
Slowly, with sorrow, my plants bow down
Slowly filling lungs with heavy misty air
Slowly calming face that started to frown
I think they can feel my endless despair.
Climbing the stairs to the top of the tower
Climbing with numb, expressionless face
Climbing with tremendously scary power
My whole body is covered in disgrace.
As I see myself bravely stand
As the birds sing with oddly silent tone
As I reach the wall with my death cold hand
My foot lightly touches the stone.
While the wind plays with my ruffled gown
While I fly aside to my death
While the clouds have taken over the dawn
I am giving away my last breath.
Comments on "Wind queen"
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On Thursday, December 29, 2016, Adagios
(716) wrote:
great write, self reflective despite the word painting. i like that.
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On Thursday, December 29, 2016, EllenVonV
(8) wrote:
Thank you very much, glad you like it
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On Wednesday, December 28, 2016, Queazenart
(200) wrote:
I like the way each stanza acts as it's own scene. You use repetition quite effectively here as well. Good job.
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On Wednesday, December 28, 2016, EllenVonV
(8) wrote:
That was my intention, I'm glad that I've succeeded. Thank you
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On Wednesday, December 28, 2016, Just Dave
(448) wrote:
Great poem. One of the most visual poems I've read in some time.. Superb write. JD
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On Wednesday, December 28, 2016, EllenVonV
(8) wrote:
I'm glad you like it. Thank you